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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Doctor/Nurse (11/02/06)

TITLE: A Nurse's Lament
By Pat Guy
11/08/06


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Take each memory,
Release its pain,
These images I no longer can bear,
The eyes, Dear Lord, that cry no tears,
Eyes full of desolate hope.

I relive each face, I sense each touch, I hear each heart, Dear Lord.


Stomachs are empty,
Streets are full,
Children brushed away like dust,
Abandoned, Dear Lord, left as trash,
Abandoned to deviant means.

I scrape their sores, I bandage their wounds, they drop in my arms to rest.


Death on his shoulders,
Trained to aim,
His finger barely reaches the trigger,
He trembles, Dear Lord, and squints his eyes,
He trembles as blood sprays his face.

I bathe his cheek, I change his shirt, he drops the M4 to rest.


Too weak to whimper,
She stares above,
Oblivious to dawn’s early light,
This land, Dear Lord, of terminal death,
This land too poor to heal.

I cool her brow, I sing her song, she sighs as she’s laid to rest.


Take each memory,
Release its pain,
These images I no longer can bear,
The eyes, Dear Lord, that cry no tears,
Eyes full of desolate hope.

Hold them close, warm their soul, hear their hearts, Dear Lord.























Author’s note: An M4 is a semiautomatic rifle.

©2006


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terri tiffany11/09/06
Good point of view - and some vivid images. I think I like the line with the rifle the best. It reads like a prayer ( is that what lament means?) Very good!!:))
Louise Fountain11/09/06
Altogether lovely.
Amy Michelle Wiley 11/12/06
Wow. Talk about a powerful poem. So well-written, too! I won't be surprised if this is in the winner's circle.
Jan Ackerson 11/12/06
Very good, Pat! My time on the grand jury has opened my eyes to people who really do live like this, in inner cities, and it's heartbreaking. In the last verse, maybe "souls" instead of "soul?" Other than that, gorgeous poetry. I don't know if you have nursing experience, but it certainly feel as if you tapped into a nurse's heart.
Lynda Lee Schab 11/12/06
Simply beautiful, Pat. You've truly captured a true nurse's heart. Well done.
Jan Ross11/12/06
I'm left speechless with the depth of this lament. Beautifully written with power and impact. Awesome ... incredibly awesome!
william price11/12/06
Masterful wordsmithing. Excelent job.
God bless.
Betty Castleberry11/12/06
This is excellent. The imagery is awesome. Wow!
Joanne Sher 11/13/06
Oh wow, Pat - this grabbed me and didn't let go! The images are so stark and realistic and shocking. Amazing!
Monique Fox11/13/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Linda Watson Owen11/13/06
The image of the eyes that cry no tears is a beautifully haunting image, Pat. All of this poem is so powerful and gripping, but those eyes really stay with me. You've truly captured the power of the memories that remain in the mind of someone who deals with death and pain every day. Wonderfully woven words!!
Sue Dent11/15/06
Excellent! I don't usually like this style of writing. You did a GRAND job!
Donna Emery11/15/06
This was so wonderful. I sensed the pulse of the place and of the nurse's life. Thanks so much for sharing this.
Venice Kichura11/15/06
Yep, I agree---I think this is another winner. Sounds like you ARE a nurse?
Sally Hanan11/15/06
Are you Mother Theresa come back to life?? Teehee, just kidding :) Great job here - you should do more of this.
Trina Courtenay11/15/06
Great poem - deep and meaningful.
Suzanne R11/16/06
Your format was really effective, and the content was very touching. WELL DONE!
Laurie Glass11/18/06
I like the form of this poem and it really tugs at the heart. Great job.


   
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