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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: Answer in a Maze
By Ann Grover
09/13/06


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“That must be it.”

Wreathed in painted ivy, the sign read, “Cloudberry Hill Maze Garden. One Mile.”

I had been wanting to wander through a hedged labyrinth for a long time. It hadn’t been difficult to convince Dave, but I had been a little shy about suggesting it, maybe because I thought he’d think it was a rather pointless pursuit.

We bought tickets from a liveried attendant and received a glossy brochure. Holding hands, we entered the maze between tall spiraling topiaries.

“Quite the work of art,” Dave observed.

We went to the right, and I remembered reading that a certain percentage of labyrinths spiraled counterclockwise. The yews and boxwoods were luxuriant and dense, and I brushed my hand against the thick foliage. Not a leaf was out of place; every twig was precision cut.

“Imagine the power tools needed to keep this in shape,” I exclaimed.

“Look, it says here that mazes provided perfect opportunities for secret dalliances. Let’s say we have a little dalliance.” Dave winked.

Somewhere in the maze a child’s laughter rang out, and Dave leaned over and gave me a warm embrace and a kiss.

“That’ll have to keep you. I think it’s too crowded for a dalliance.”

Round and round, back and forth we went, following the twists and turns of the garden maze. Every time we thought we were near the entrance, the labyrinth took a sharp reversal or terminated in a green wall. It wasn’t as though we were trying to extricate ourselves from the convoluted greenery, though, as wandering was the point of our venture. Occasionally, we made room for a family to pass or moved around a couple not so hesitant about having an affectionate moment.

Eventually, we came to a “Y” in the passage.

“What do you think? Right or left?” I asked.

“Both. Let’s each take a path. Maybe I’ll find my way out. I’m getting a little tired.”

I looked into Dave’s peaked face. Why hadn’t I noticed he was flagging?

“I’ll come with you.”

“No, you stay and enjoy the maze. Please.” Dave’s sweet coaxing was adamant. I didn’t want to leave him, but I relented to the persistent plea in his eyes. We hugged, and reluctantly, I took the right hand path while he disappeared down the other trail.

Once again, reality had followed us like a faithful dog. Dave’s worsening health issue was an ever-increasing weight in our life, bearing down in cycles of anguish and turmoil, holding us in its tightening grip of uncertainty and bewilderment.

Rather like this maze, I mused.

Meandering through the verdant tunnels, I considered the recent windings that our life had taken, the long vigils at hospitals, waiting for results and relief. I came to a switchback in the maze and thought how often there’d been no answers, and we’d had to start Dave’s testings all over again.

An amorous couple was seated on a bench, lost in each other, and I remembered our early years, when we thought we were immortal and would love forever. Now the loving and the living was being tried.

The path began to make quarter rounds, back and forth, and then abruptly came to a dead end. For a moment, ire rose in me, and I wanted to climb the hedge, avoid the labyrinth altogether, find Dave and go home. Denial. Instead, I leaned against the springy wall, felt it take my weight, and wished it would absorb me, let me disappear. Tears of frustration welled up as I began to follow the path back in ever widening circles, this time taking a different turn.

All at once, I was in the very heart of the garden.

A pool reflected the azure sky, and I sat down on the stone rim. I trailed my fingers across the water, causing ripplets to lap softly over the surface.

High above, a bird sang...

My thoughts are higher than your thoughts...

With sudden clarity, I realized that from His point of view, God does not see a puzzlement or a crooked way. In Him, there is neither confusion nor convolution. Tears splashed into the pool.

I journeyed to the exit without walking into any dead ends, without hitting a switchback or a forked trail. Dave was sitting on a bench in the sun, his eyes closed, gently snoring. I leaned over and gave him a kiss.

“Are you up for a dalliance?”


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Lynda Schultz 09/14/06
Bitter-sweet and beautiful. Great job!
Kim Thomas09/14/06
This is the intersection of life and love...beautifully written, and completely believeable. I know the feelings full well. Thanks for sharing the Hope.
Val Clark09/16/06
This is a delightful piece that had me leaning forward on my seat throughout! I loved the way you wove the 'devotional' through the narrative and finished with such a strong affirmation of love for Dave. Powerful writing. yeggy
Jen Davis09/17/06
A heartfelt and insightful journey through a garden maze. I loved the setting for this beautifully written story. Very nicely done.
Amy Michelle Wiley 09/17/06
Oh, how often I have been in that maze of looking for anwsers to medical problems, but only finding more twists and turns. Well done!
Joanne Sher 09/19/06
Oh, Ann - I NEEDED to read this this morning! How did you get into my head??? Your voice is wonderful wonderful here, and such a well-told message. I think I just may need to print this one out! This is my favorite so far this week!!
Teri Wilson09/19/06
Nice take on the topic. It reminded me of The Shining (ha!), only sweet. Loved the message.
Jan Ross09/19/06
I love the descriptions -- I was following you every step of the way, even my concern for "Dave" seemed genuine! Great piece! Very creative and well done! God bless! :)
Cheryl Harrison 09/19/06
Very touching. I loved this line:

With sudden clarity, I realized that from His point of view, God does not see a puzzlement or a crooked way. In Him, there is neither confusion nor convolution.

Good job.
Donna Emery09/19/06
Oh, this is lovely. How well I can relate to the sentiments in this piece. Very well written, and it really touched my heart. Thanks so much for sharing this.
Jan Ackerson 09/19/06
Very tender and sweet--I could really relate to the hospital passages, and I love the way you portrayed this couple's relationship. Lovely.
Shari Armstrong 09/19/06
Great -delightful, real, and a touch of heartach.! I've always been facinated by the hedge mazes (and was reminded about a dream I had about one years ago that I'd forgotten about till reading this).
Beth Muehlhausen09/19/06
I was right there, every step of the way - but especially at the point of reflection about failing health. Then the questioning, the direction, the awareness of a bigger perspective. An effective story with a strong moral....
Patrick Oden09/20/06
Very nice. You gave this story twists and turns, giving us corners to walk around.

I liked your word "dalliance". You used it as a great connection between the beginning and the end of the story, with hints throughout. It it's an uncommon word with wonderful character and perfectly suited.

Two spots threw me out of the rhythm along the way.

"Rather like this maze, I mused."

Your whole story is pointing this direction and by making this point explicit you've taken something from the reader and dulled the creativity a little. The thoughts of the story already imply this.

The second is the word "amorous" before couple. The "lost in each other" phrase shows us, "amorous" tells us. Plus, "amorous" is a little formal for the general flow of the story.

But, these are mere nitpicks about a really engaging, well written story.
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/20/06
A maze as an analogy for life was done excellently, especially with the thought that God oversees each direction we take. I appreciated the thoughts here.
Melanie Kerr 09/20/06
I liked the switch in the middle of the narrative to describing a maze of a different kind.
Pat Guy 09/22/06
I loved this message. I loved this work. I loved this story. (I was afraid something was going to happen to him in the maze! Whew!)
Karen Treharne09/23/06
This is awesome, Ann. A delightful story to read and a worthwhile choice for 4th place. Congratulations and God's blessings.


   
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