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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: Spindly Little Men
By Kenn Allan
09/13/06


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Last evening near the twilight hour,
Too early to retire,
I pondered on the Holy Book,
Before an endless fire.

But as I closed the Book of Joel,
And added my 'Amen,'
Outside the window something moved—
And then it moved again ...

... outlined against the moonlit path,
Danced spindly little men.


It is my sole and lonely task,
To tend my LORD’s estate,
And keep all blossoms trimmed and safe,
Within the garden gate.

So while convinced I was deceived,
By the uncertain light,
I felt compelled to rub my eyes,
And squint into the night ...

... I heard those spindly little men,
All laughing with delight.


My fists were clenched in pious rage ...
My eyes embraced the gloom ...
I listened as those spindly men,
Discussed the garden's doom.

They scuttled briefly out of sight,
Behind the potter's shed,
Then soon returned astride some snails,
To storm the flower bed ...

... I should have stopped their slimy charge,
But watched in awe instead.


They sucked away the baby's breath,
And tore the roots from mums,
They pulled the foxgloves to the ground,
And sliced off all their thumbs.

They sharpened all the rosebush thorns,
To pierce my flesh when squeezed,
And pilfered blooms from marigolds,
To squander as they pleased ...

... I knew then these spindly men,
Would never be appeased.


I flung the front door open wide,
And rushed into the night,
Determined if these fiends persist,
I'd give them quite a fight.

A plowshare snatched among my gear,
Then down the path I flew,
To fling it at the mounted snails—
I furrowed quite a few ...

... but deep inside my racing heart,
I knew I was not through.


From somewhere high above my head,
There came a fearsome drone—
The dreaded beat of locust wings ...
But they were not alone.

Upon their backs were little men,
Each swinging bags of seeds,
Of choking vines and dandelions,
And other noxious weeds ...

... they headed for the flowerbeds
To sow unholy deeds.


As the swarm passed overhead,
The largest swooped at me,
And tossed vile wormwood in my eyes,
In hopes I would not see.

My fingers grasped a pruning hook,
Which leaned against the shed,
And thrust it like a sharpened spear,
Until the swarm was shred ...

... unable to resist my ire,
The wicked legions fled.


I claimed the garden battlefield,
In triumph for my LORD,
And vowed to keep a watchful eye,
For vermin once ignored.

Although in shadows they conspire,
And will attack again,
I promise to be more aware—
I'm wiser now than then ...

... and nevermore shall I be fooled,
By spindly little men.



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Lynda Schultz 09/14/06
And I thought that snail climbing up the BBQ cover was so CUTE! Yikes! Love it, love it, love it. You are a master (or mistress) or your craft!
Jacqueline Zerres09/14/06
As a gardener, I was in there rooting for the demise of the wretched creatures. As a budding writer, all I could sau is "Bravo"!
Val Clark09/16/06
I could see the whole event like a cartoon! Spindly men on snails! Swooping locusts! What a battle and a timely reminder to be prepared. (Technically it bothers me though that all but the couplet in the last stanza rhyme.)
Marilyn Schnepp 09/18/06
A delightful poem! Great Rhyme, along with a story that made perfect sense...just deliciously delightful! Loved it! Loved it! Loved it! Thank you. Super job!
Jan Ross09/19/06
If you aren't a "Master" then I don't know who is! My goodness! This is so wonderfully creative, perfectly constructed, and a most enjoyable read! Wow! Wow! Wow! :)
Cheryl Harrison 09/19/06
Wow! Beautiful job on the topic. Whoever thought that spiritual warfare could have rhyme and rhythm. :o) Loved it!
Donna Emery09/19/06
I caught the parallels to "the Raven" in the first paragraph, and admired the way you kept to its pattern and theme throughout! Excellent! I really enjoyed it.
Joanne Sher 09/19/06
Such imagery - it will stick with me for a LONG time! Just love your stuff. Very effective in getting across its point and being beautiful at the same time. :D
Jan Ackerson 09/19/06
You're back, and with another awesome entry! Dust off a spot on the mantel. (I may be one of your biggest fans.)
Beth Muehlhausen09/19/06
EXTRA-ORDINARY! No words to describe this...it's just awesome. I was hooked for sure when I got to: "They sucked away the baby's breath,
And tore the roots from mums,
They pulled the foxgloves to the ground,
And sliced off all their thumbs." Just fabulous stuff. :-)
Sharlyn Guthrie 09/19/06
Now I have to reread Joel to find out what inspired this! I love it, and I'm sure even my kindergarteners would enjoy it, too. It's that good!:-)
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/20/06
Purely delightful read! Amazing creativity!
Melanie Kerr 09/20/06
Quite a spooky poem – it brought out the hairs on the back of my neck! This lends itself to illustrations! Of course the message is wonderful –as is the poem itself.
william price09/21/06
Congratulations Ken.
Pat Guy 09/22/06
Wow Kenn! What-a-read! Great messasge/story/poem/talent ... and all the etc.'s! ;)
Karen Treharne09/23/06
Nicely done, Kenn. A great read and worthy of your first place win. Much congratulations.
Leigh MacKelvey09/26/06
Oh my goodenss, if I can ever write poetry like you...I will feel sooooo blessed! Do you take on students??!!
Cherry Bieber09/28/06
From the heart of this poet, thank you! This is a truly incredible piece and a Glory to God!
Monique Fox11/13/06
Come and post your poetry at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/


   
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