The Official Writing Challenge
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This is beautiful. It really moved me and helped me to see some things in a whole new light. Even though I'm not homeless, I could relate to many of the feeling of your MC.
08/21/10
Wow, I like how the character sees God in the acts of kindness that are bestowed upon him. Reminds me of when Jesus said, "If you do these things to the least of these, you've done them unto me." Great job of showing how God can work through us to touch someone . . . and telling it from the POV of the person being helped.

The only part that confused me was the line at the very end about a child being taken and a shot ringing out. (The character's turn to be the hand of Jesus in someone's life perhaps?) Other than that, it's really amazing and flowed beautifully.
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