The Official Writing Challenge
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10/29/09
Very powerful and moving story! Good writing!
Good work. Those cell phones will be the death of someone...oh, wait a minute, they already have been.

The surroundings were easy to see through you words.

May God bless and keep you writing always.

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

11/02/09
Descriptive and pungent use of words in this unique story-telling. Thanks. Colin
11/02/09
Great title, perfect for the tone of this piece. It was a tad busy with the POV shifts, but I loved how you made it all work together. Good job.
11/03/09
Busy POV but easy to understand. Your story held an important message. Nice job.