The Official Writing Challenge
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08/08/08
Boy I can relate to the "fear of heights" aspect of this. You've tied this up with a comforting devotion at the end. Your story is a wonderful example of the verse you have at the bottom.
This is good! Real good! Your descriptions and sensory information drew me in, and I could feel the child's fear. The way you tied it up with the verse at the end was a very nice touch as well, and it gave meaning to the story.

Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reading it.