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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)
Some cousins are friendly, others are strange
Some are very comely, others just plain
But they are kin just the same

They can be charming, or absolute bores
They can be sweet, or just mean to the core
But they are kin just the same

They come in all shapes, colors, and size
They can be stupid, or they can be wise
But they are kin just the same

While we don’t choose the cousins we’re given
They can bring blessings or pain while livin’
Yes, they are kin just the same

We share such memories of days at play
Favorite cousins who've long moved away
Yes, they are kin just the same

Family is always for good or bad
They can bless us fully or drive us mad
Yes, they are kin just the same

So if you’ve cousins you're truly so blessed
Always do love them, including their mess
Cause, they are kin just the same
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Beth LaBuff 
05/30/08
Excellent cousin analysis is this poem. I like this, "While we don’t choose the cousins we’re given
They can bring blessings or pain while livin’" I had to smile at your repeated line, "Yes, they are kin just the same." Nice work.
Sharlyn Guthrie
06/02/08
There's a lot of truth in this piece! The repeated line works well, and it's certainly true.
Cheri Hardaway
06/02/08
Nice rhyme scheme. Good message about appreciating family. Nice work. Blessings, Cheri
Jan Ackerson
06/02/08
I like the repetition at the end of each stanza.

I'd suggest working on more interesting rhymes--rhymes of more than one syllable, for example, or just unexpected pairings of words--to bump your poem up a level of quality.

You're definitely a very good poet, and ready to stretch it a bit in difficulty...I enjoyed this a lot.
Joshua Janoski
06/03/08
I like the repeated line at the end of each stanza. This was short but sweet. Thank you for sharing this. :)
Debbie Wistrom
06/03/08
Your words have brought back memories. I have been blessed with cousins, most whom are more pleasure than pain.

Your repeated line brings home your message very well!
LauraLee Shaw
06/04/08
This is such a great poem, especially for children! This is exactly the type of poetry that I see in Highlights and other kids' publications.
Betty Castleberry
06/04/08
Ya know, the first line pretty well sums up my whole family. This is a very sweet poem, and I love the repetition in it.
Sara Harricharan
06/04/08
Love the repeating line, it fits this piece just perfectly! ^_^
Verna Cole Mitchell 
06/04/08
"Kin just the same"--has a nice ring to it. I enjoyed this and could see it illustrated very well in a children's book, and then extended to all kinds of kin. There's an assignment for you!