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TITLE: Man's Stupidity | Previous Challenge Entry
By Patricia Williams
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There is a great unrest, the earth is dark and cold
Rotating back and forth, tossing to and fro.
The heavens flash a ring of fire that sets its sphere aglow
Yielding to the powers beyond, that brings its dreadful woe.
Yet man is walking his beaten path, he plods into total night
Unaware the darkness is, the total lack of light.
A call to open sleepy eyes and wisdom now to seek
No road ahead to walk upon, no earth beneath his feet.
Without the feel of falling, no heed to hear the call
He walks the road that leads to Hell and slowly starts to fall.
The pull of evil dulls his sense, he can’t control his ways
He’s pulled by powers of evil, with burning fiery flames.
He opens his sleepy eyes and shakes the wicked trance
And tries to find his direction away from the evil chants.
Covering his ears to stop the sounds of hissing demonic cries
He finds his spirit lost in Hell for life he’ll never die.
Oh Hell where is your grave his spirit cries and pleads
No death is your reward, for all your evil deeds.
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Your last two verses were a bit unclear to me; perhaps some clarification is needed? The way it's phrased, it almost sounds as if "no death" is the reward for stupidity.
The rhymed couplets worked for me in this short poem.