The Official Writing Challenge
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04/29/07
This one was very dear to my heart, as I have a daughter with mobility problems who wondered at one time if anyone would fall for her.

A few minor grammar problems: a misplaced modifier and a tense shift--no big deal.

I like the open-ended ending, full of hope. Quite lovely and satisfying.
04/30/07
Very nice romance story -- I really hope the boy gets the girl.

I did notice a few tense changes throughout -- easy enough to correct.

Well done.
04/30/07
Good descriptions of the characters and their actions. Sweet romance in the making!
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. I liked this. Good writing.
I like the promise in this piece. Left me wanting to know what would happen next. Nice work. Cheri
There is more to the story here for sure. This was well written no frill romance.
05/03/07
If not for a few speedbumps that can be easily fixed this is a wonderful story. I loved the heart of it. Great job. God bless.