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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Work (07/27/06)

TITLE: A Quick Bite to Eat
By Debbie Sickler
08/01/06


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Eve was in the mood to prepare something special for Adam’s evening meal. She had searched high and low, but nothing she’d found so far seemed quite right. Eve leaned against a tree, resting in the shade of its wide branches, ready to give up.

“What’s the matter sweet cheeks?”

The voice startled Eve and she spun around to find a serpent lounging, hidden amongst the tree’s leaves.

“Oh, hello. I-I wanted to make a wonderful meal for my new husband, Adam, but nothing seems good enough. To be honest, the sun is high in the sky and I’m starting to get a little tired of looking.” Eve hung her head, her brown eyes filling with tears of disappointment.

“What are you crying about? There’s plenty of delicious fruit right here beside me.” The serpent slithered to a comfortable looking fork in a large limb.

“Oh I can’t take any of that fruit. God told us not to, though it is the best looking fruit in the garden …” Eve looked up at the plump fruit longingly. The serpent sat poised, ready to move in for the kill.

“God-shmod. What does he know anyway? Look babe. You wanna please your man, right? I mean, ya gotta keep the guy happy don’t cha?”

“Of course, but God said--”

“Listen up girly. I just saw God put that guy Adam to sleep, pull out one of his ribs and then you showed up. I seem to recall quite a few more ribs where that one came from…so if you don’t wanna bend a few rules to please Adam, I’m sure God…”

“Wait! I guess I could…” Eve reached towards the tree, and then hesitated.

“Oh come on already! Just take some. Do you really wanna run around the whole garden in this heat, when what your man wants is right here? Why waste your time? Who needs all that hard work anyway?” The serpent plunged his verbal fangs into Eve’s soft flesh.

“Well, it would be a lot easier to just take some from here. Then I could start cooking sooner and have more time to rest before he comes home…Ok. I’ll do it.” Eve plucked some choice fruit off the tree while the serpent gleefully pointed out the juiciest ones.



“You just had to have that fruit, didn’t you Eve?” Adam scowled at his wife in disgust.

“But honey! It’s like I told you. It was getting late and I wanted to make a good meal for you after you’d worked so hard naming all those animals. The tree was right there in front of me. It was easier to just…” Eve pleaded with Adam who barely looked up at her.

“Worked so hard? You think it was hard work sitting in the shade, having God’s nature parade past me while I rambled off any odd syllables that came out of my mouth, like aardvark or platypus? You call that hard work? What do you call this?” He continued digging away at the parched soil, grumbling when his stick hit a rather large rock.

“Well how was I supposed to know it would all turn out like this? I just wanted something for dinner…” Eve began to sniffle again as she yanked on a rather stubborn weed, nearly toppling over when it finally came free. Adam tugged at the scratchy fig leaf that was riding up his backside, creating the world’s first wedgy.

“You missed one.” Adam quipped over his shoulder as he and his wife toiled away into the night.


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Marilyn Schnepp 08/05/06
A real "hip' version of that first Fast Food drive through, eh? Something quick and easy that still makes our teeth ache today - along with that newly invented four letter word that causes sweat on the brow, dirty hands and aching backs. Yes, we sure do have a bone to pick with our First earth parents when we meet them face to face.

An "off the wall" and change of pace type entry, but enjoyable; plus a welcome relief from the hum-drum and mundane. Thanks bunches.
Virginia Gorg08/05/06
Nicely done with humor and modern language. However, you missed one point - Genesis 3:6: gave some to her husband, who was with her -- I think it's significant that Adam just watched what happened. I do like this, though, it gave me a good laugh.
Rita Garcia08/08/06
Entertaining and delightful way to weave a great message!!
Joanne Sher 08/08/06
This is so cute - I love the "world's first wedgy"! This is clever. I can tell you had fun writing this one!
Sara Harricharan 08/08/06
I loved this! Great job!
Jacqueline Zerres08/08/06
Loved the story. My favorite line was "I seem to recall quite a few more ribs where that one came from…so if you don’t wanna bend a few rules to please Adam, I’m sure God…”
How much like our adversary to appeal to our flesh! Wish I could lay the blame on our representatives, but had I been there, it would only have been a matter of time...
Great job!
Venice Kichura08/09/06
This is excellent!