The Official Writing Challenge
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08/04/06
You definitely captured the frantic. hectic pace of this woman's day, and the struggles she was battling in her head. I felt like I was right there with her. A great portrait of this harried woman!
08/05/06
Wonder if she ever got her story done. Nicely done and a frantic life is never easy.
08/06/06
A hectic day for sure! One suggestion I'd love to make - which would ease up the pace a bit - and that would be to explain that a baby does not, should not, and can not, DENY the Mother anything! I couldn't get over the fact that the baby WOULDN'T ALLOW the mother to put her down so she could bathe!! Amazing! Even with or without the 'Teething problem". Whatever happened to good old discipline? Nice job of writing, however. (And we wonder how juvenile delinquints come about?)