The Official Writing Challenge
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07/30/06
I liked the definition of walk that you used for this, describing a woman's wedding day. I actually thought at first she was younger and getting ready to go on stage for some reason at the very beginning, maybe that was just me (my daughter is Emily and she just had her first dance class, so maybe that's why..).

There are some really good moments throughout, but watch for spelling errors (Canon instead of Cannon, lose instead of loose, aisle, not isle). Also, watch POV shift when you start talking about what the dad is thinking.

Very sweet moment you captured.
08/02/06
A very special moment. I enjoyed how her "mind traveled to fond memories..." as she walked down the aisle. The prayer was lovely and very on topic. Good job.
08/03/06
I too thought Emily was going on stage, but it was really a new stage in her life. It was beautifully told as you recounted her experience just before her marriage.