The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/06
Oooooooooooh, this is beautiful. I'm crying. You have conveyed a beautiful lesson, interlacing the topic with such great dialog. It reminded me of tying a pair of shoes, one suttle revelation at a time until just the right loop was made,forming a perfect bow. Awesome! bjc
07/27/06
Hold on let me get a tissue, okay. You had me right there walking with this father and son, I am so glad you ended it the way you did. Beautiful story!
This is wonderful. It's rich in sad family tradition and love. Well written. I loved it.
07/28/06
Your dialogue is wonderful - I felt like I really knew both characters. What a wonderful story and lesson!
07/28/06
This is really good. Not the ending I expected, and that's a good thing. Well done, flows nicely, and gives a strong message.
07/28/06
I was able to visualize the entire story - even the weathered face of the old Cherokee. The path finally chosen was not new, but the old tradition of respecting elders for their wisdom ... Mark realized this before it was too late. Well done.
08/01/06
Great job with the dialog, and with giving us a glimpse into another culture. Very tender story.