The Official Writing Challenge
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07/22/06
I love this line:
"The fact is, when we board the midnight train, we exhale for the last time on earth and inhale in eternity." Thank you for this interesting read on the topic.
07/24/06
I love this line: "Thatís soul music we can dance to, and it has a good beat."

Since this is masters and we can be more picky, I'd just add that the facts that you weren't at the ... um ... funeral??? ... in question and that your uncle died three years after your dad was kind of irrelevant. Perhaps these extra details slightly confused the main point ... but that's just my 2c worth.

The piece was great - thought provoking - humorous and yet serious - well done.

How on earth could the staff have forgotten your uncle's ashes???!!! I bet somebody got a severe rap over the knuckles for that!
07/25/06
It may be for another chapter, but I'm glad you mentioned it anyway: "Just for the record, humans are humans and angels are angels and neither the twain shall merge." Very good.