The Official Writing Challenge
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07/20/06
Wow...I mean this...I'm jealous.:) This moved me to the point of tears. At first I wondered why you wrote about the guy's hand and then you so perfectly tied it together. Your phrases flow and are so descriptive. I have to say that this is powerful and full of strong meaning...the kind I like to see. The only part I at first didn't like was the put put of her car but then I decided you needed that to show her poverty.
07/21/06
Loved the concept of the 'extremely useful car'! A fun touch that described more of who she is. Well done.
07/21/06
Very touching! A great example of the hand of God (physically and spiritually) being there when we need Him.
Heart rending! I felt the poverty and the richness! Great job!
Just beautiful & it does move one to tears!
07/27/06
This was a truly excellent piece, Pat. I am shocked by the minimal comments - but I didn't see your hint this week, so that could explain it! Beautiful writing from beginning to end, end, end. :-)
Pure poetry in prose, Pat!! Beautiful!!
This is beautiful! I love the message and the echo at the end.