The Official Writing Challenge
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07/20/06
terrific verb use and descriptive language. I like how you broke it up where you did.
07/20/06
Excellent use of words to paint such a vivid picture of a soul bound for hell. I actually thought this was a soul already in hell (if you wrote it that way, it would be a superb evangelistic piece). I was glad to see how you showed a soul transformed and redeemed. I love happy endings! Great writing.
07/21/06
Vivid and well told. Great job!
07/27/06
Well done. Congratulations!
Congratulations Stephanie!
07/31/06
Stephanie,
You really got after it with that word paintbrush! You had too many incredible lines to name them al--beautiful, awful descriptions of Hell (either literally or figuratively, as you used to describe the soul without Christ). I thought you'd have the poor narrator choose evil for a minute--view herself as too unworthy and fling herself into the concept of herself she could see most clearly...happens too often in real life, I'm afraid.
Wonderful piece, although I'm not sure you shouldn't have placed a bit higher!
:) Debora