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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Great (07/06/06)

TITLE: Walking the Valley
By Jennifer Waddell
07/12/06


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Setting: A Park
Erica is sitting on a bench next to the playground, overlooking a lake. She is deep in thought. Kelly arrives with her two kids and sees her friend on the bench. Her children scamper over to the playground and Kelly takes a seat beside Erica.

Kelly: Hey Erica, how are you?

Erica: (Snapping out of her trance) Iím great!

Kelly: How is Ken?

Erica: Heís great!

Kelly: Is he enjoying his new job?

Erica: Oh, itís great!

Kelly: I heard that your mother was in the hospital, how is she doing?

Erica: Sheís actually doing really great right now. Hopefully, sheíll be able to come home soon.

Kelly: That would be great!

Erica: Indeed!

They share a long moment of silence. Each lost in her own thoughts as they stare across the lake.

Kelly: So, do you want to talk about it?

Erica: Talk about what? Everything is great!

Kelly: (Turning to face Erica) Erica, Iím your friend and I love you.

Erica: Thatís great, Kel, I really appreciate that.

Kelly: (Reaching out to touch her friend, in a soft voice) I know you.

Erica: (Looking away) I know.

Kelly: Erica, how are you?

Erica: (Close to tears) Not great.

Kelly: Iím here for you.

Erica: (In a small voice) Thank you.

Kelly: Iíll leave you alone if you want. Iím sorry I brought it up.

Kelly stands to go, but Ericaís words make her stop.

Erica: I only had 4 more months to go. (Starting to cry) I just wish I knew what I did wrong. (Pause) I feel so empty, you know?

Kelly: (Putting her arms around her friend.) Actually (Beat) I do know.

Erica: You do?

Kelly: I had a miscarriage too.

Kelly and Erica cling to each other as tears cascade from their eyes. They are united in their sorrow. At last, Erica finds her voice.

Erica: How far along were you?

Kelly: I was only 2 months.

Erica: How did you get through it? (Pause as Erica watches Kellyís children playing on the jungle gym) How did you ever get the courage to try again?

Kelly: (Pulling a few tissues out of her purse, she hands one to Erica) I prayed to God for strength.

Erica: How did I know you would say that?

Kelly: I know it seems like the last thing you want to do.

Erica: (In a low voice) Iím done with God. (Louder) He used me as a pawn. (Almost shouting) We tried to get pregnant for 2 years! What did I do wrong?

Kelly: You didnít do anything wrong, honey.

Erica: (Crying again) I felt so close to Him with a life growing inside me. I was a creator just like my Heavenly Daddy. Then, he literally ripped that life out of me. How could He do that?

Kelly: Thereís no way that we can understand. His ways areÖ

Erica: (Finishing the familiar verse) higher than our ways. I know. Iíve heard that so many times, but at this point, I donít really care what His ways are.

Kelly: What can I do for you?

Erica: (Shrugging) Just be my friend. Say itís okay that Iím mad at God right now. Love me anyway.

Kelly: (Hugging her friend) I will, it is, and I do.

Erica: Thanks for being such a great friend.


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terri tiffany07/13/06
touching and realistic... the ending was perfect as it would be something someone might really say in that situation. Thanks!
Deborah Bauers07/17/06
This exposes a very real side of us when God allows soemthing to come into our lives that seems to be at variance with our concept of God's love. We need see more "real." Thanks.