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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Great (07/06/06)

TITLE: The master of deceit and lies
By T. F. Chezum


Desolate, I stay in bed,
Streams of tears flow from my eyes.
Weakened, I am vulnerable
To the master of deceit and lies.

He plays upon my deepest fears
Telling me I don’t belong.
Tightening his evil grip,
Hypnotizing with his song.

The words he whispers tantalize,
Saying he’ll relieve my pain.
Flustering my weary mind
As my life spins down the drain.

Ashamed, I hide in my despair;
Falling for his ruthless guise.
Tormented in solitude
By the master of deceit and lies.

I suffer through my worthless days,
Depression I can’t comprehend.
Struggling with my somber thoughts,
Hoping this sad life will end.

But in pictures on the wall,
Reflections from times long ago
Through a child’s eye life was grand.
A feeling I no longer know.

Confusion overwhelms my soul.
Staring helpless toward the skies,
Fearing I cannot escape
From the master of deceit and lies.

I contemplate surrendering,
Beaten in this desperate fight.
Hoping there is more for me,
Looking for a ray of light.

Yearning for a better life,
I wonder why I even care.
Knowing somehow I must change
Whimpering a silent prayer,

“Please Dear Lord, I beg of you.
Do you hear my mournful cries?
Save me with your boundless love
From the master of deceit and lies.”

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James Clem 07/13/06
Nicely Done - "Great" job!
Mark Anthony Belosa07/14/06
Great rhyming and message...
Marilyn Schnepp 07/15/06
Excellent poetry - but weak on the Challenge Topic for this week.
Melanie Kerr 07/15/06
I liked the repetition of the phrase “master of deceit and lies.” I thought your choice of words was spot on.
Rita Garcia07/17/06
Wonderful and Inspirational!
Brenda Craig07/17/06
A cry of hope always frees us. All the enemy does can be undone by one simple prayer to our great God. Thank you for your wondrful poem!
Jan Ackerson 07/17/06
Well done, effective repitition--I just wanted one more verse...
Donna Haug07/17/06
I definately felt your dispair. I thought you were going to have your turn around in the line that began, " But in pictures ..." Nice rhythm and rhyme feel.
Pat Guy 07/17/06
Tim! I'm impressed! I would have liked that 'ray of Light' to have been sqeezing through the closet cutains or something! Pretty Good!
william price07/17/06
Excellent job Tim. I enjoyed this Greatly.
Helen Paynter07/18/06
A poweful poem, but (since you're in Masters) in places I stumbled over the rhythm. Some very strong writing here though
Lynda Lee Schab 07/18/06
Excellent poetry - I enjoyed the rhythm and the message was very effective. I did struggle to connect with the topic - I assume it's either how great your feelings of hopelessness are or how greatly powerful the master of deceipt and lies can be. Other than that, well done!
Trina Courtenay07/18/06
A great poem indeed. I'm with the others about connecting it to the topic.
J. C. Lamont07/18/06
Very, very well done. Excellent. I can not say enough.
Suzanne R07/19/06
Wow - you've really expressed some deep feelings here ... so sad....... Well written.
Purity Snowe07/20/06
I thought this was the strongest poem this week just based on the depth of emotion. Great work!
George Parler 07/20/06
Poem? Man, the rhythm is so pronounced you can sing it. Great message my friend. Good job.