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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Favoritism (02/28/05)

TITLE: The Other Woman
By Maxx .
03/04/05


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Frank smoothed his hands over her curves and shuddered. Could his wife ever make him feel this way? Candy cobalt blue, fins, and chrome. Oh, that chrome. He moved his face close to it, watching his reflection flicker across the script Bel Air logo of his 1957 Chevy. “What a dream you are, Millie. What a dream.” He snapped his chamois and began to work her third coat of wax. Three coats was enough but only if they made Millie sparkle, and not just a little.

The door between the house and the garage flew open. “I don’t understand it, Frank. I just don’t understand it.” The bespectacled woman stood with the TV remote in her hands and a look of exasperation on her face. “I can’t get Wheel on the TV. I can’t miss Vanna. How do I change the channel?” She punched at the control like a one fingered typist until by random luck Pat Sajack’s voice echoed through the room.

The door swung shut.

He worked his toothbrush around the twin hood ornaments; soft bristle, of course. Firm would scratch the clear varnish sealant. That could take hours of buffing to repair, a fact he knew from experience. He’d spent worse nights, like when his wife insisted on watching Letterman in bed. Millie made no foolish demands and performed whenever she was asked.

“Kristy lost her gerbil.”

He hadn’t seen her come back.

“Kristy lost her gerbil and the toilet’s stopped up. How long can they hold their breath?” She placed her hands on her squishy hips and sighed. “Well?” Rolling her eyes, she turned away.

The door slammed.

Millie wore a hardtop. White, to match the sides of her tires. Two doors, although one was all Frank needed. Three made a crowd when he went cruising with his favorite gal. He loved her best when he could love her alone. Millie was always ready to go places, just the two of them. He smiled and petted her rounded headlights, while taking his tweezers to the radiator grill. “Can’t have any pests caught in your teeth, can we?”

His wife propped the door with a stop. “I think our new neighbor might be a bank robber. A police car was at his house today. You never can tell. Men have shifty eyes. Don’t you think?” She blinked. “I saw Eunie Boomgarden in the grocery. She looked bad, really old. Turns out it was actually Grandpa Johnson. He says ‘hi’.” She walked away but called back over her shoulder as she clattered dishes in the kitchen sink. “Did you know that some parts of pine cones are edible? I read about it on my writer’s blog. I think there’s a recipe for soup somewhere.”

Frank crept to the door and closed it.

He opened the hood. Raw power. A fully detailed 283 horse power Super Turbo-Fire V-8 engine smiled at him. He felt his cheeks flush with warmth. He loved looking at Millie’s private parts. “Gonna check your fluids, darling. Gotta make sure you’re topped off just right.” He wiped oil, the color of transparent caramel, onto his sleeve and beamed. He pulled a fresh rag from his pocket and buffed the engine block, polishing the chrome distributor and radiator caps. “Now don’t that make you feel pretty?”

“So I said that if her louse of a husband even talked to that floozy again she should make him sleep in the garage for a year.”

Frank looked from Millie to his spouse — she’d used a chair to prevent further door closures — wondering if he could skip the floozy and go straight to sleeping in the garage.

“And can you believe that Shannon is gone? At least that’s what I heard. Taking a tour of the islands. Imagine it, after all that she’s been through. I just don’t understand people.”

At last, something that he could relate to. Frank ran his palm over his face and shook his head. He pressed the button on the garage opener and watched the slatted metal partition roll upwards, drowning out the words that nattered from the house.

He slipped into the driver’s seat. The smell of canvas and vinyl encircled him; he inhaled deeply. He took the wheel, fondling the grips with his eager fingers. The engine muttered when he turned the key. “Yes, baby. Yes, baby. Yes, baby. Yes, baby.”

Frank groaned with satisfaction.

He placed Millie in gear and drove away.


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Marina Perrault03/07/05
I laughed as I read the third sentence and realized who the other woman was. As I read on I felt sad that the two of them had left their first love and settled for second-rate substitutes!!
Lynda Lee Schab 03/07/05
What can I say? This was a classic (pun intended). I marveled throughout at the cleverness of it all! Loved the humor yet this definitely could be true to life. My husband and I often joke about our next door neighbor - about how he's CONSTANTLY out in his garage! Hmmm....
Great story, exceptionally written.
Blessings, Lynda
Jamie Driggers03/07/05
priceless! exceptional! like my hubby and his laptop!
Judy Anderson03/08/05
So often we can get caught up in our own world and end up closing doors to those around us. This was a fun and also meaningful read! I guess in my case it's my husband's golf clubs. Gof bless you.
Mandy Houk03/08/05
I was worried till I saw the line about the fins and chrome. What a great read!

Funny but sad.
Corinne Smelker03/08/05
Very well written - and a too sad reality unfortunately
Kristy Cox03/08/05
Very interesting beginning! Where do the characters change and grow? Perhaps I've been teaching Literature too long ... Where does it end? Do they ever come back together? Or is the leaving part perhaps for good? There is some foreshadowing there.
Overall, I liked this one ...
In His Grip,
KC
Sally Hanan03/10/05
This was brilliant, absolutely hands down my favorite.
Debbie OConnor03/10/05
Wow! An amazing read. Very clever.
donna robinson03/10/05
Very Clever! I vascillated between liking this character, feeling sorry for him and then wanting to smack him! lol All in all a great way to describe people who find a substitute to help them deal with the people in their lives they'd really rather not.
Favorite line? I think the one about "skipping the floozy and going straight to the garage"!
Kathy Cartee03/11/05
Brings back memories of a 57 Chevy my husband had years ago.
Even today he loves old cars.
I am glad he stayed around and did not drive off with her. LOL

Well written story.


Kathy
Dave Wagner03/11/05
Man, o man, this one absolutely rocks. I loved it, every words. I am so glad I decided to read some of these tonight - this one's a homerun, big time.

>> “Kristy lost her gerbil and the toilet’s stopped up. How long can they hold their breath?<<

>> She looked bad, really old. Turns out it was actually Grandpa Johnson.<<

>>...wondering if he could skip the floozy and go straight to sleeping in the garage.<<

I haven't read something this rich in ages. Thanks for posting it. What a riot.
Lynne Cox03/12/05
I sure did enjoy this, even though it had an undercurrent of sadness. Very well written and held my interest all the way through.
Joanne Malley03/14/05
I have to agree with Dave. This piece rocks! Done with ease, cleverness and wit. I'm disappointed it didn't place. Regardless, your talent shines. Joanne
Jessica Schmit05/14/06
I skipped a few entries because I wanted to leave a comment on this one. I remember this story when I first read it in the challenge a year ago. It's never left. It's stayed with me like "Under the East Side," "Ashley,"and "The Pit" have stayed etched in my mind. I would love to see you send this story into a marriage enrichment course. ME and my husband took one called "His Needs her Needs." it covers how an affair can extend it's evil hand to objects and hobbies as well as a person. I always think about this story when I realize that something in my life is taking up my husband's space. So be encourged! The lessons you weave in your stories don't stay on this site, they are applicable and have remained with me and will probably be there. Great job!


   
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