The Official Writing Challenge
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06/22/06
A very sweet extended metaphor, well executed. Take a look, perhaps, at the third paragraph, which is just a tad confusing. Otherwise, lovely, and I really liked the appearance of the happy little girl at the end.
06/23/06
I really like this. Life is often what we make of it and it is a whole lot sweeter when we remember that the Lord is always with us. I, too, had a little problem understanding the third paragraph, but as a whole, it gave me a good feeling. Nicely done!
06/24/06
Good writing. I like your title.
06/26/06
Liked the setting, and the symbolism. Good job.A DAVEY FAV for sure!