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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Abundance (06/08/06)

TITLE: The Lima Bean Prayer
By Anita Neuman
06/15/06


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Dear God,

Thank You that we have a lot of Post-It notes, because we have so much fun writing silly notes and sticking them on each other.
No, thank you that we have each other to stick Post-It notes on.

Thank You that we never run out of thank you cards, because Mom says we always have to write a thank you card to someone if they give us a present.
No, thank You that we have so many people who love us enough to give us presents. Maybe someday weíll run out of thank you cards and weíll have to make our own.

Thank You for making up camping. Itís so much fun, except when it rains.
No, thank You that I can go camping with my family and we can have so much fun, even if it rains the whole time.

Thank You for all the different kinds of books. Itís great learning about things and using my imagination with the stories.
No, thank You that my mom and dad read to me a lot and help me to learn to read all by myself.

Thank You for all my fancy clothes. I love to dress up pretty for church.
No, thank You that we get to go to church. Some of my friends at school donít go to church and they donít even know about You!

Thank You that we always have enough other vegetables that I donít have to eat my lima beans.
And thank You that my mom and dad are here to eat them for me.

Amen


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Andre Kingston06/15/06
I love the bit about lima beans at the end! That is just so right. I also love how you have written a prayer in the style of a child. It is neat. However, I found the "No, thank you for..." was cute the first time but not the second. Vary your phrases around a bit more. I have never known a child to be organized enough to get what they mean right the first time very often, but they don't correct themselves the same way each time. For exampe, a child would get really excited about camping and thank God about a lot of stuff around that like biking or that sister got stung by a bee, but the narrator didn't.

Cute prayer overall and keep it up.
Miss Andre.
Melanie Kerr 06/15/06
I like the idea that your prayer ecnourages me to think at a deeper level that just the surface of things.
Jessica Schmit06/15/06
This was fun, sweet, had a terrific message and was very creative. And the author is (what's that...she's off chasing a new guy..tisk, tisk) Never mind I thought it was someone I knew, but I was just informed that the author I was seeking is off chasing new men.

Love ya girl. This has "you" written all over it. Great work!
Amy Michelle Wiley 06/15/06
Hehehe, Jess, you're funny!

Um, sorry, was commenting on the Prayer, wasn't I? :-p That was cute! I love it.
Sally Hanan06/17/06
My favorite aspect of this is the way you take the focus off the 'things' each time and replace it onto people. It opened a little window for me into how to pray differently - thanks :)
Pat Guy 06/17/06
And amen!
Marilyn Schnepp 06/17/06
This is Top Echelon Country, right? The Title drew me in; and I "ditto" Andre Kingston's comments regarding the overuse of the "No, I thank you"..for something else. Cute ending, (Fido did the honors for me), and very creative Title.
Marilyn Schnepp 06/17/06
This is Top Echelon Country, right? The Title drew me in; and I "ditto" Andre Kingston's comments regarding the overuse of the "No, I thank you"..for something else. Cute ending, (Fido did the honors for me), and very creative Title.
Allison Egley 06/18/06
I liked the repetitive line, actually. It reminds me of one of those books that repeats the same line so the children can chime in by the last time it is read. I can see this making a really cute children's book.
Trina Courtenay06/19/06
This is cute!

And yes I still would have said so even if Jess hadn't spilled the lima beans about who the author is. Great Job. Oh and I agree about the children's book.

Trina<><
Dr. Sharon Schuetz06/22/06
I loved the way you took the prayer to a deeper level. Great job.