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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Abundance (06/08/06)

TITLE: The Success and Abundance of Jimmy Cage
By Dan Blankenship


Televangelists had never been among Jimmy Cage’s favorite people. However, Pastor Reynold Hughes Jr. had a message that Jimmy could not ignore. The fastest growing ministry in the world today, the Hughes’ Empire offered record selling CDs and DVDs for just about every moneymaking venture one could think of.

It had been six months since Jimmy received his first CD and workbook concerning building an Internet business from scratch, and he sat at his computer answering a few questions from one of his customers.

He always had time for consumers; after all, the brand new Mustang in his garage was paid for by their hard earned money they had decided to send to him. They also paid off his house, his motorcycle, and his three Jet Skis.

He pushed send and receive on his e-mail tool bar. “Hmmm…another incoming e-mail. Probably another client thanking me for providing them with their weekly Super-X-Ultra-Human-Everything-You Need-Multivitamins,” he thought. Seventy-five dollars a bottle was a steal as far as Jimmy was concerned.

The subject line on the e-mail read, “I’ve had enough. I’m leaving you, Jimmy!”

Jimmy sat there in disbelief. “How could I have let this happen?” he said under his breath. He felt his pulse quicken. He suddenly felt a lump in his throat the size of a bullfrog. His eyes began to water, and he started to tremble. Why would Debbie do this to him? Yes, he had extremely busy building his business, but he tried to always be there for her.

“I’ve been a complete fool,” he thought, sliding his chair away from the computer and burying his head in his hands. His best down line associate was breaking from his successful multilevel marketing group. Tears fell from his eyes as he thought about the amount of revenue he would lose if Debbie Purcell was serious about breaking away.

While Jimmy Cage sat there thinking about his next move, two horrific beings, completely invisible to Jimmy, watched from behind the computer chair. They smelled of sulfur, and charcoal grey fumes expelled from their dragon-like heads. The two creatures from the bottomless pit exchanged nods of approval. They had actively influenced another victim of their false ministry with the lure of abundance.

After the two towering demons left Jimmy Cage’s house, believing they had a firm grasp on his soul, two beautiful and strong entities entered the residence from the attic. The glow of their purity and heavenly aura illuminated every room they entered, but Jimmy could see none of the light pouring forth. The angels sent from the Lord looked at each other as they stood behind the weeping man in the chair. “We have a lot of work to do on this one,” the bigger and more senior angel said to his apprentice.

And their work began, with the blessing of the Holy of Holies!

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Jan Ackerson 06/19/06
Clever idea for a story; I hope you expand it some day.
Helen Paynter06/20/06
I like the way you portrayed the futility of the world's abundance. Think it might have been better to finish with the demons, rather than the angels.
Phyllis Inniss 06/21/06
A good story showing the futility of being overwhelmed by success. I think the end reminds the reader of hope, a necessary adjunct to faith.