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06/16/06
Good story. You drew me with a good lead, and kept me there to the end. Thanks.
Extremely gripping piece! Your transition from the breathless action of the race to the hospital room was superb! Great dialogue, too--I could feel the wife's grief, the cold bitterness of his trauma, revealing the emptiness that lurked there all along. Chilling finale, great writing!
06/19/06
Good story, weel told with a strong ending. Well done.
06/19/06
Your translation needs some working on, but otherwise this is a good story.
06/20/06
Enjoyed the story and the gripping emotion that coursed through it to the end.
06/21/06
Very well done, especially on Jorge's bitterness. Gripping story.
Excellent story. It was powerful and gripping. Thanks.