Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Four Ways For A Christian Writer To Win A Publishing Package HERE



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Abundance (06/08/06)

TITLE: Flyin' High
By Venice Kichura
06/10/06


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

Flyin’ High


One day when I was overwhelmed
With all the stuff I owned
I looked around, and sighed aloud.
“I have too much,” I moaned.

Instead of clearing out my stash
I surfed the internet
And found a site that beckoned me,
“Please stay, you won’t regret.”

I found that I was not alone---
That others just like me
Had clutter in their homes and lived
Most discontentedly.

I was a “Side-tracked Home Exec”
(Or better known as SHE)
My visit to “Flylady.com”---
Began to set me free.



Their “27-Boogie Fling”
Teach housewives, lovingly,
A simple plan to rid their homes
Of clutter and debris.



It says, “Take one large garbage bag;
Seize 27 things
Of total junk that no one wants---
Just trash that you will fling.”

I grabbed another garbage bag,
For things I used no more.
It was so nice to finally have
A clean and empty drawer.


Into my car I lugged a bag
That weighed at least a ton
I warned myself, Don’t dare look back,
Just turn the key and run!”





I drove directly, did not stop
To Goodwill by the Sea.
And gladly gave my stuff away
To those with less than me.


Since flyin’ high with Flylady
I feel so good inside.
When guest arrive I don’t slam doors
For now they’re open wide.




But just as I was satisfied
And smiled, I’m doin’ good,
But God replied, “Now listen, child,
I thought you understood.”

“It’s not just all your earthly wares
That tend to overflow.
I’ve blessed your soul abundantly.
And now it’s time to grow.”

“Unless you give away My Word
And weed out Satan’s lies,
You will be cluttered in your mind.
Your faith then rots and dies.”

And so I went and gave away
Some nuggets from God’s Word
And threw out all those damming thoughts
That screamed, Your dream’s absurd.


I tossed out all those lies that lured,
Give up the Christian race
Because your faith is far too weak
You cannot not run the pace.


Since I’ve decluttered spiritually
I now can testify---
I’m blessed far more abundantly.
In Christ I’m flyin’ high.


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
Accept Jesus as Your Lord and Savior Right Now - CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 1071 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Sherry Wendling06/15/06
Zzzzzing! You got me! Laughing. Convicted. Great story, in nice, tight verse! Very strong ending, taking the humor and diving deep and to the point. Well done!
Melanie Kerr 06/17/06
Superb! I loved it! Every line and every word carefully selected and the message so clear. I love your word choices - they are just spot on. Even the odd spaces between the verses worked really well!
Pat Guy 06/17/06
Bravo! (for a minute there, I thought she was going to see all her stuff at a garage sale or on the tables of Goodwill and buy everything back!) :)

Never had so much fun being convicted! :)
Linda Watson Owen06/18/06
Beautifully done! Meter and word choice 'right on'! Message is delightful yet pointed and relevant! Great treatment of this topic!!!
WENDY DECKER06/19/06
I haven't read any entries in quite awhile. I'm sure glad I stopped by to read this one. I had me smiling the whole read. Your meter and word choices flowed materfully. I guess that's why you're in the Master's category.(:
WENDY DECKER06/19/06
Hmmm, I guess I can't go back and fix all my typos. LOL
Brenda Craig06/20/06
Loved this, clean the cabients and the mind all with good humor. Delightful.
Maxx .06/20/06
I wondered about where this was going at the beginning. But the ending was so strong that it really clarified things! Very good lessons. Keep at it!
Sally Hanan06/21/06
Great lesson on the benefits of Flylady, but even more on how much more important it is to declutter our minds compared to our homes (even though it is hard to think with so much junk in every corner).
dub W06/21/06
Fun use of rhyming language, a couple of forced pieces, but good work overall.
Jan Ackerson 06/21/06
Delightful!
Suzanne R06/21/06
Excellent work! I love it - both the practical and the spiritual decluttering.

I bet you can get this published somewhere! Give it a go.
Trina Courtenay06/21/06
In Christ I'm flying high...kinda reminds me of being a Jesus Freak. I just loved that last line.

What's more important than that was the message. I really needed that. Thank-you so much.

Blessings!
Trina<><
Dr. Sharon Schuetz06/21/06
Beautifully done. It drew me in from the beginning and kept me to the end. Loved it.