The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
You picked me up and took me there - I was completely in that jam with you, looking at the windmills and the grass on the hills. Good job. Minor nitpick - you used the word 'bored' twice in close succession, and one or two sentences were a bit long. Otherwise, great.
06/10/06
Good illustration of turning an real annoyance into a blessing. The transformation seemed a bit quick, but I liked how the character looked beyond the obvious and found what else was there.
06/11/06
Good premise for the topic of Peace. In todays world, we all need a good dose of peace during a traffic jam LOL.
Beacause you're in Masters, I will nit-pick and say there were a few grammatical errors and run-ons that I noticed, especially at the beginning. Also, there were a couple of word reiterations that stood out. PM me if you want me to explain.
But loved the message and the heart of your entry.