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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Personal Peace (06/01/06)

TITLE: Redemption Came
By Carla Feagans
06/07/06


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Your fingers gripped my arms
Pressing daggers
Into my heart
Yet I did not scream

You nearly crushed me
With your weight
Bearing down
Yet I did not fight

You ravaged me
Tore open my soul
I bled
Yet I did not run

You had no clue
Of the mess you
Left
Yet I did not tell

Your life continued
While mine stood still
Frozen
Yet I pretended to live

You were no longer in my mind
Yet you tainted my thoughts
About myself
About others

You did not know
The extent of the damage

I did not know
The extent of the damage


But God knew


He came to me
Chased me down
Pursued me
Unrelenting

He did not let me rest
In my complacency

With Him
– I screamed
– I fought
– I resisted
– I ran
But He wouldn’t let me go

He bore down on me
Until I broke
And then!
And then
He rebuilt me
He revived me
He restored my soul

He gave me LIFE
Where there was only death

He loved me whole

I am strong now
You are weak
I forgave you
I wanted you to know

I came to you
And you
Felt bad
But your empty apologies meant nothing

Redemption came
But not from you
You will never know
You will never “get it”


But God does


His love is my peace


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david grant06/09/06
Well done.
I could really feal the hurt and anger, and then the redemption in that poem. Hope one day we'll get to feel the salvation of the person who hurt you so badly.

A Davey for Empathy!
Jan Ackerson 06/12/06
Well crafted--I like the fact that you used the same verbs in each half, yet they carried very different connotations.
Sherry Wendling06/14/06
I'm so glad you found the courage to post such a personal, painful experience! It's purely honest, one of those healing and cleansing pieces, a holy journal entry. I liked the colorful imagery of the opening lines, "Your fingers gripped my arms
Pressing daggers
Into my heart."

As the healing keeps unfolding, I picture you revisiting this poem, painting yet more vibrant, deep colors on the restoration parts. I have a few pieces like this; they are treasures that grow with me.

What a gift you have, to use your skilled pen to open paths of healing and restoration for many!