The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
Well done.
I could really feal the hurt and anger, and then the redemption in that poem. Hope one day we'll get to feel the salvation of the person who hurt you so badly.

A Davey for Empathy!
06/12/06
Well crafted--I like the fact that you used the same verbs in each half, yet they carried very different connotations.
I'm so glad you found the courage to post such a personal, painful experience! It's purely honest, one of those healing and cleansing pieces, a holy journal entry. I liked the colorful imagery of the opening lines, "Your fingers gripped my arms
Pressing daggers
Into my heart."

As the healing keeps unfolding, I picture you revisiting this poem, painting yet more vibrant, deep colors on the restoration parts. I have a few pieces like this; they are treasures that grow with me.

What a gift you have, to use your skilled pen to open paths of healing and restoration for many!