The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job overall. I can sense some details that would have enlivened this -- details about Cora's life, her death. Let us get into your skin and hers some more and we will be hooked.
God bless
You told the story and related your struggle in a shorter story than most. It was easy to read and understand. I think you did a great job of condensing to make your point of obtaining personal peace.
This was quite easy to read - your wording flows well and invites the reader into the character's head. However, it seemed unfinished to me. This seems like only a few pieces of the story. You left me wanting more - which is not totally a bad thing. You gave me enough of a connection with the character that I wanted to know what happened.
Beautiful, Karen. Moving ... honest ... life...... Thank you for sharing this glimpse into your heart.