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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Personal Peace (06/01/06)

TITLE: Unworldly Peace
By Al Boyce
06/06/06


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Like day and night, two warring states
Exist in daily life
The first speaks clearly to the flesh
To lust and appetite

Chaos rules, when in its thrall
We find our lives consumed
We find no peace, no resting place
Our spirits are entombed

The second state, invisible
Like gossamer it seems
To barely hold our consciousness
It tickles us in dreams

Yet only there may peace be found
Midst crashing waves of doubt
God's kingdom is embodied there
Still sleeping, in the boat.

As fear wins out, we take control
We strongly man the oars
And navigate, between the shoals
Of famine, hatred, wars

But peace, it still eludes our grasp
When we are at the helm
For peace has never made its home
Outside the Godly realm

King David learned this lesson well
When from his son he fled
Let Absolom take over all
His fortress, wealth and bed

"Thy will be done," he said to God
"May heart and mind abide
"In Kingdom matters rather than
"My worldly, foolish pride."

Surrendered then, King David found
His case was not so grave
Despite his exile far from home
His domicile a cave

Within those walls he wrote the words
Synonymous with calm
That ages hence would be seen as
The most beloved Psalm

By pastures green, by waters still
My shepherd always leads
In valleys dark, on evil paths
Jehovah intercedes

When Christ awakens on this boat
He steers us off the shoal
And in His kingdom, not in ours
The Lord restores my soul


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Helen Paynter06/09/06
Great poem. My only quibble - doubt and boat as a rhyme. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this.
Jan Ackerson 06/12/06
I love the imagery and the flow of the first six stanzas...the rhythm mirrors that of a swaying boat, and the poem really worked for me. I'm not sure if the King David parts were as effective, because the first part was so meditative, and the David verses more of a narrative. But that could just be me...this is a really, really lovely poem, strong in rhyme, meter, and beautiful word choices. I was particularly taken by the concept that "Peace" will never be at home in this realm. Perfect.
Edy T Johnson 06/12/06
How I relish poetry done well, and this definitely is! Your choice words, your rhyme and meter just sing the message of peace. And, your scriptural allusions reinforce the message. Splendid writing---God bless your gift!
Anita Neuman06/14/06
I really liked this entry! Most of your rhymes are very creative (consumed, entombed and helm, realm) - I appreciate that! Great job.
Sally Hanan06/15/06
You did a good job with this one Al, and I liked the way you wove Biblical truth into it all.