The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
Great poem. My only quibble - doubt and boat as a rhyme. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this.
06/12/06
I love the imagery and the flow of the first six stanzas...the rhythm mirrors that of a swaying boat, and the poem really worked for me. I'm not sure if the King David parts were as effective, because the first part was so meditative, and the David verses more of a narrative. But that could just be me...this is a really, really lovely poem, strong in rhyme, meter, and beautiful word choices. I was particularly taken by the concept that "Peace" will never be at home in this realm. Perfect.
06/12/06
How I relish poetry done well, and this definitely is! Your choice words, your rhyme and meter just sing the message of peace. And, your scriptural allusions reinforce the message. Splendid writing---God bless your gift!
06/14/06
I really liked this entry! Most of your rhymes are very creative (consumed, entombed and helm, realm) - I appreciate that! Great job.
06/15/06
You did a good job with this one Al, and I liked the way you wove Biblical truth into it all.