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06/08/06
I loved the way this concept was weaved into an ordinary day. It's made me think - and that's a good thing!

Great everything about this story. Scene, dialogue, voice, message - just everything. I loved and thoroughly enjoyed this one!



Who would WANT to be employed by a boss like that??? I wouldn't. I thought the sweat pouring down her face was a bit incongruous. Definitely an intriguing way to pray. Write well.
06/09/06
Hey - I thought I'd invented the alphabet prayer! (I use it to help me get to sleep instead of counting sheep)Good piece, with a good message in it.
You'd recieve a five for creativity from me. great work!
Great story! I was a tad confused about the job reassignment thing, but I think I figured it out, and she was glad to get a different assignment, right? Good job!
06/12/06
This is great, had me on pins and needles, and the ABC prayer is just the sort of thing that appeals to the word-player in me. I'll be experimenting with it, for sure!
Good job. You kept the pace all the way through. I really enjoyed it.
06/13/06
Wow - what a great idea! Alphabet praying. It sounds like a great prayer to keep you focused. Gotta try that one. Anyway...excellent concept, nice story flow. And anything that mentions "coffee" gets my vote. LOL
06/15/06
Hey Suz!
This is brilliant. I have to admit I'm with Amy- I was a bit confused about the job bit at the end, but only momentarily. I figured it out, and I think it has less to do with your writing and more to do with the fact that I need another coffee (or perhaps an alphabet prayer?!) anyway, absolutely wonderful story. I felt this nervous tension all the way through, like a suspensful part in a movie! You could easily expand this into a novel I reckon. In your "spare time"!! ha ha
love ya, and so does Zion,
Kaz
06/15/06
This was great Suzanne and could easily have been in the EC because you were so creative with your story.
06/19/06
Suz! It's been a while. Beautiful prayer. It really is.
Great submission.
I got a little confused at the Angie-Jane exchanges since Angie was the one praying.
Lovely thought to how we should be spending each waking moment.