The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
How I despise parents who can do this to children - they should go to Anger Management courses. One little blooper (I think, although my brain cell might be switched off!) - you say that the closet is too small to lie down in, but at the end, Jackie curls on her little bed and sleeps long and peacefully. Write well.
06/09/06
Powerful piece of writing, handling the topic well. I think I've spotted another slight error - if she's only seen the beach on TV she probably doesn't know it has a special smell. TIny point, great piece.
06/10/06
This was so disturbing, but it should be. Incredible take on this heart wrenching subject.
06/14/06
This is such expressive writing, it makes the reader feel as if she has become the child in your story. God bless your talent for his glory!
06/15/06
You did a great job of describing how God gives kids -in circumstances like these- a way out.