The Official Writing Challenge
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How I despise parents who can do this to children - they should go to Anger Management courses. One little blooper (I think, although my brain cell might be switched off!) - you say that the closet is too small to lie down in, but at the end, Jackie curls on her little bed and sleeps long and peacefully. Write well.
Powerful piece of writing, handling the topic well. I think I've spotted another slight error - if she's only seen the beach on TV she probably doesn't know it has a special smell. TIny point, great piece.
This was so disturbing, but it should be. Incredible take on this heart wrenching subject.
This is such expressive writing, it makes the reader feel as if she has become the child in your story. God bless your talent for his glory!
You did a great job of describing how God gives kids -in circumstances like these- a way out.