The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/06
A very sad but intriguing story. Although I'm not sure how it will measure up to the judges view of the Personal Peace topic, it is still a well told story. Good job.
06/12/06
Wow! If this had a tiny bit more closure for the reader it would have a double Wow!

Fantastic writing, voice and everything. The reader knows the father dies - but to shoot himself is too sad and hopeless for us! Maybe he could have called the room too late or something, and then mumbled a 'Not now.' to his daughter, still not ready to surrender.

I loved this read! It ALMOST made me cry. Wow!
06/12/06
Not being in the middle of all the angst of divorced parents is personal peace. As gritty as this story is, things like this do happen. A friend of mine lost both parents the same week. It was rough.

This was heartbreaking to read, but made me want to hug my mom. Thanks for that:-) Great writing with an unexpected ending!