The Official Writing Challenge
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06/02/06
A vivid picture! Love the ending.
Wow! I can identify! I had the same experience, not from a gunshot wound but during the birth of a child who died. Nice work; you really got to me.
06/02/06
Your talent for poetry is evident. However, I didn't feel a strong message of purpose here; just an underlying one. High marks, though! What an accomplishment to make such a story rhyme and flow effortlessly.
06/05/06
This was pretty good. I liked the meter and wordsmithing. Well done.
06/07/06
Your choice of words is quite exquisite. Well done!