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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Joy (05/18/06)

TITLE: Sequence of Joy
By Sharlyn Guthrie
05/25/06


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Like unexpected cool, refreshing rain
showered on the evil and the just,
joy seeps through lingering clouds of grief and pain,
sprinkling those who do and do not trust.

On chance and circumstance this joy depends
Öperilously totters on a rail.
A sudden gust or shifting of the winds
topples and defeats its effort frail.

This joy erupts, but soon it must elapse,
as surely as a wilting withering leaf.
Beholden, it drifts just beyond my grasp,
a temporary bliss however brief.

Yet there exists a rare, uncommon joy
for those who lean upon the Fatherís breast;
one that doom and crisis canít destroy,
regardless how they put it to the test.

Planted deep, this joy springs from the Source.
The Spirit tends His flourishing fruit with care.
Inspiring and efficacious force,
His bounteous, blessed gift He's pleased to share.

Still, joy is tempered here by sin and woe.
The bridegroom yearns to make my joy complete!
Consummate, boundless streams of joy will flow,
Immersing me before His mercy seat.


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david grant05/26/06
Whew! Reading that poem was like swimming downstream. The rythmic currents took me all the way to the end and left me sitting, wondering on the river back.

Great job. One of my favs.

Leslie Lamb05/26/06
This has lyrical flow. A timeless piece.
Sherry Wendling05/29/06
A poem of true depth and beauty! I like the way you build the progression, from earth's fleeting joys, to sublime heavenly joy, and then!!! The BRIDEGROOM's joy, "Immersing me before His mercy seat." Very strong ending.

Suggestions: Just a little polishing for consistent word order on the "frail" line, and one more line further down where you didn't need the "just' because the rhythm was already tight.

This is one of those pieces that must be eaten slowly and chewed thoroughly to be appreciated for the gem it is!

Sherry Wendling06/01/06
GREAT BIG CONGRATS, Sharlyn!!! Your gem made EC this week! You're moving faster than the Roadrunner. (BeepBeep!)

Edy T Johnson 06/01/06
Congratulations, Sharlyn! I relish good poetry and this is really fine food for the soul. I'm so happy for you! God bless your writing.
Sally Hanan06/02/06
This was beautifully worded Sharlyn. Congratulations on your win.
Beth Muehlhausen06/02/06
Just lovely!! Congrats!!! :-)