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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Joy (05/18/06)

TITLE: When Myra Sang
By dub W
05/18/06


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Myra tried to look through the stained glass window of the big downtown church. Strains of “Ode to Joy,” soaked through the beautiful colors in the glass. “Oh, love, it will be so wonderful, they will roll a red carpet out for us.” A slight Bavarian accent frequented her words, but only the breeze in the alley way greeted her speech.

“Mercy, aren’t you the darling one.” She placed a hand on a lamp post and swung around. “You sir are so tall and strong. Would you mind helping a lady across the avenue? Will you be in the orchestra?”

“Come on Myra, let’s go back to the park.” A uniformed police officer approached the ragged lady spinning on the light post.”

“Cool it love, it’s the cops.” Myra held tightly to the post.

“Let’s go Myra, I really don’t have time this evening for your nonsense, let’s go.”

“Do you hear love, the young man in uniform is proposing to whisk me away.” She stopped spinning and glared at the officer. “You sir, take the joy out of being alive, why don’t you go to the park and I will stay here and listen to the music.”

“Myra, I’ve had to continually run you away from this church, you worry the good people.”

The officer started pushing her cart toward the corner.

“Take your hands off of my property,” she screamed. “Gestapo!”

The officer parked the cart. “Hush, Myra, if I have call for a car you are going to spend the night in jail, now let’s get you away from the church and off to the park.”

Myra looked at the lamp post. “Do you hear? The uniformed gentleman has offered to take me to the park, you never did that.” Myra turned to the officer. “Very well, we shall be off; if you will just let me listen to the rest of this music they are rehearsing. I promise I won’t take a step toward the front of the church.”

The police officer shook his head. “Okay, but just a few minutes, we don’t want people seeing you here.”

“Listen, the tenor is about to sing.”

From cracked-open window a tenor’s voice was heard singing: “Joyously, / Through Heaven's glorious order…”

“Now the chorus.” Choral voices rang inside the church.

Myra began a low tone then burst into a soprano voice singing in German.
“Freude, schöner Götterfunken,
Tochter aus Elysium,
wir betreten feuertrunken,
Himmlische, dein Heiligtum!
Deine Zauber binden wieder,
was die Mode streng geteilt:
alle Menschen werden Brüder,
wo dein snafter Flügel weilt.”

The music came to a sudden and abrupt halt.

Myra took a deep breath. The officer quickly stepped up on the curb. “Come on Myra, your stage days are over. They will probably have us both arrested.”

Myra stumbled down to her shopping cart and bumped it off the curb.

A small man holding a baton rounded the corner of the church. “Wait, wait,” he cried.

“Oh, oh.” The officer stepped between Myra and the man with the baton.

“Please, I must speak to that voice,” the man pled, his eyes budging and tears running down his face.

“We’re just moving along sir, no need to get excited, I won’t let her bother y’all again.”

“No, no, please, she sings as one trained in German opera, please sir let me speak with her.”

“Listen, she’s a little off, you know touched, a street person.”

He shook the baton at the officer. “All the great artists were crazy.” The man peeked around at the grubby woman hiding behind the officer. “You sing for me yes? Where you sing before?”

“Neukoellner, sir.”

“Oh, my. Oh Praise God. My dear where have you been?”

“Here sir, I have no sponsor, my company was disbanded.”

“We will sponsor you.” The small man was shaking with joy. “Officer, take that cart to the back of the church, we will keep it safe, but she is coming inside to the chorus.”

“Yes, yes, oh joy.” The small man reached a hand to Myra.

A dirty hand extended around the officer grasped the hand of the small man. “Thank you sir this is the happiest day I have had since arriving here.”

Note: Many talented artists – music, dance, theatre, are being forced into the street by government cuts and uncultured opinions. It is said that in New York today, one could create an Opera company and orchestra from the homeless.


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Debora Dyess05/25/06
Thank you for a different view of the homeless--so many people simply see 'what' they are instead of who they are. And, sadly, I'm sure they are run off from the churches, the very place they should be able to go for help.
Watch punctuation--it steals from your clarity and from your story. Using different punctuation marks can add to the depth of the character's emotions and paint a more clear picture of what's going on in their mind.
Again, thanks for a new perspective.
david grant05/25/06
Good story. Sometimes joy hides,and waits for the hunter to find it.

Rita Garcia05/25/06
I love this portrait of a homeless person. Food for thought at its very best. Great entry!
Cassie Memmer05/25/06
This is a beautiful story! I loved the line "soaked through the beautiful colors in the glass." I could nearly hear the music too. I never knew there was a problem such as this. Wonderful character! I loved this!
Valora Otis05/26/06
I was so swept up by the story line, that I wanted to follow them into the church. I can hear her singing in my mind, right along side the other choir members.Thank you for this beautiful story full of joy and compassionate service!
Teri Wilson05/26/06
Very nice work.
Sherry Wendling05/27/06
Not only a beautiful story, but wonderful characterization. I loved her monologue with the lamp post, and the maestro's "All the great artists were crazy!" And yes, true to life; while assisting street ministers in Boston (and in prisons), I was amazed at the brain and talent pool waiting to be tapped! Wonderful piece.
George Parler 05/28/06
I've met many such as Myra. We tend to make assumptions of others based upon their present condition, or social status forgetting that the present is not yet the summation of their life while the hope another day exists. Very good writing!
Jan Ackerson 05/28/06
This is one of my favorites of yours, perhaps becuase of the beautiful music you send sounding through my brain. You've created a marvelous character!
Venice Kichura05/28/06
Excellent writing! You really know how to capture your characters & setting. This would make a great chapter in a book.
Joanne Malley05/28/06
I really enjoyed the storyline and the setting you created...it was so nicely done. Would like to mention that although I understand the purpose of the song in a different language, I would have enjoyed reading AND understanding. Nice message. Too many "Myra's" are often overlooked. Jo
Joanne Malley05/28/06
Also...loved Myra's character. You created such a unique individual!
Pat Guy 05/29/06
Oh my! I didn't know! Surely there is a ministry, an awareness that roams the streets looking for these disconnected people!

Beautiful and haunting.

By the way, what is, ...'eyes budging...'? ;) (is it a German term?) ;)
Pat Guy 05/29/06
PS. I loved this. It's one a person doesn't forget.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/29/06
I loved it. You flawlessly created the characters. They were so real. Thanks for the reminder that there are so many out there who need a "sponser".
Anita Neuman05/29/06
This is one of your best stories, I think. It's such a simple story about such a complex issue - and you've brought it to light beautifully.
darlene hight05/29/06
Very nice job! I thought the characterization was excellent. I am curious about the song. A little hint of what it is would have made it better for me but I thoroughly enjoyed it anyway. And I loved that it ended well. I wouldn't have liked the idea of a church group running off a homeless person although I am sure that it happens.


   
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