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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Prosperity (05/11/06)

TITLE: Prosperity's son
By Rod Loche
05/18/06


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I was born in prosperity’s home, brought into the world by her hands, nursed by her tender bosom. She raised me as if I were her only child, teaching me to love only her and that which she thought worthy of her temporal interests. When I was still small she gave me the most peculiar pair of green contacts. She told me to wear them always. If ever I removed them, she assured me, I would risk gazing upon a sea of despair and likely cease to recognize her lovely face. It was a thought too painful to bear. At first they felt uncomfortable, but soon I got used to them. As the years passed I eventually forgot I was even wearing them.
Then one day I left home in search of a gift for her. I entered a small shop and was immediately surrounded by clear jars of fragrance. An old woman sat in the corner. She sang as she slowly rocked her fragile body back and forth. She sang a song I had never heard. The words were simple.

So many sorrows, so little time
I’ll touch your sorrow if you will touch mine
No more tomorrows, don’t waste your time
Give love today make your life divine

I stood and listened to her repeating the verse over and over. I was briefly mesmerized by her raspy acapella voice. Soon I regained my wits and returned my attention to the task at hand. I took one jar from the shelf and smelled the contents. There was nothing. Bewildered, I grabbed a second and a third jar. Nothing. I turned to the proprietor in frustration only to see her smiling in return.
“Something wrong?”
“Well I would say so! You’ve got this place filled with odorless fragrances!”
The woman paused without losing her smile.
“You must be Prosperity’s son.”
“How do you know who I am? And why would I want to visit a shop that sells tiny jars of water?”
“I would have you know that everything in this shop is free, and I know who you are because of your poor sight.”
“I told you. My sight is fine. I can see you, I can see these jars, I can even see the water in the jars.”
“That’s not water. It’s tears.
“Tears? Where did they come from?”
“People of course.”
“What do you do with so many tears?”
“I give them away.”
“Give them away?”
“Yes, to people with the capacity to love. When somebody’s pain is too difficult to deal with on there own they come here and we cry together. I put the tears in a jar. Then they go home with someone else’s jar.”
“Why on earth would they leave with someone else’s tears?
“To pray for them. Every time they see that jar of tears they are moved to pray for the person who shed them.”
“Well they look like water to me. I do believe this is the most peculiar place I have ever come across?
“The jars have no meaning to you because your vision is blurred.”
“I told you. My vision is fine.”
“In spite of the contacts?”
“What contacts?” As soon as I gave the response the memory struck me like a bolt of lightning.
“I am wearing contacts! Green contacts! How did you know that?”
I felt confusion pressing in on me. Is this woman toying with me? How can she know these things?
“So if I remove the contacts will I somehow see these tears differently?”
“No. You will feel them differently.”
I carefully removed the contacts. My eyes were blurry for a second but soon they regained focus. The old woman widened her smile before she spoke.
“Here. Take a jar.”
When I took the jar, I was immediately overcome by emotions. The person who had shed these tears was in pain over the loss of a loved one. It was sorrow that I had never experienced. Tears came to my eyes even though I didn’t even know this person’s name. The old woman took my hand.
“Growing up in Prosperity’s house often makes us numb to the world. Things are going to look different to you for a while.”
I was shaking. I was at a loss for words.
“What do I do now?”
“Go and pray for he who shed those tears. When you’re ready, come back and we can make sure someone prays for you. Welcome to the land of the loving.”


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Teri Wilson05/18/06
I liked this very much. Very touching. Good job!
Marilyn Schnepp 05/18/06
What a captivating story. It is very well written and took great creativity to come up with such a moving story. Such artistic people here at FW...it's like a candy store for Readers. Nice job!
Peter Thomas05/18/06
What I liked best about this is that it was fresh, which kept it interesting. Nice story.
Melanie Page05/19/06
Beautifully unique. an interesting and pertinent social comment too.
Steve Clark05/22/06
A beautiful piece! The eyes of money see the world through green bills and we do not remember our hearts. So poignant. So true.
Jan Ackerson 05/22/06
This is a beautifully done allegory--thanks so much for submitting it!
Beth Muehlhausen05/24/06
Very unique story, for sure. One quick thing..."on there own" should be "on their own". :-) Some white spaces between paragraphs and dialogue would also help the reader out a bit. The concept of tears in the bottle seems so powerful - I'm actually blown away that you could think this up!! Good job.
Joanne Malley05/25/06
Very creative. What a unique storyline. Congrats on your deserved win!
Karen Treharne05/25/06
Great story, Rod, and a worthy win. Your creative mind is to be congratulated as well. I will look forward to reading more of your work and seeing you rise on the winner's list.
Sherry Wendling05/25/06
Rod, congratulations! I'm sorry that my first glance at this was a late-night 'skim.' I didn't give it the thoughtful read it deserved. "Welcome to the land of the loving"--wonderful ending to a tender and wonderfully creative allegory! You're on your way up!
Shelley Snyder05/27/06
What a great story. I really enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your win!
Edy T Johnson 05/31/06
Oh my! This is exquisite. And, if I hadn't discovered your name, commenting on one of my poems [thank you so very much], I might have missed this. I can just see this illustrated as a storybook for parents to read to children. Such a beautiful way to instruct a little one in the sweet mystery of life! This goes in my "favorites!" Thank you. (Now, I'll have to read more of your writing!)