The Official Writing Challenge
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05/21/06
This appears to be an entry by another person other than the one entering the Challenge contest. Hmmmm?
05/22/06
A lovely message. Work a bit on consistent meter, which will help your poem to "flow" a bit better.
I enjoyed reading this take on prosperity.
First, let me say I respect anyone who writes poetry since it is NOT MY THING. So you score automatically on that point. :-)

The title caught my eye; I wondered if I'd hear about what the poor would inherit, from God's point of view. (Perhaps living w/out a care, as in your first stanza.)

I had to wonder about the authorship...??

Just FYI, the choppiness of the next-to-last stanza threw me off - I sort of lost connection at that point.

Good, strong closing comment: "Our joy in what we have
Creates our prosperity."