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05/18/06
The title caught my eye here (for reasons I'll explain another time!) But all I can say here is WOW. This is really a dramatic story, not so much a poem. But it is clearly a poem as well. I find the structure fascinating. And the content is great! "I saw his hands were bleeding" Just wow. Very good writing. Congrats to this author for something truly unique.
Deeply moving, beautifully crafted. You catch the inner eye and draw the reader into the character like a master painter. I loved this!
05/21/06
Brilliant. Loved the word usage, loved the images, loved the atmosphere, loved the message... can I stop now?
05/21/06
What a picture you paint. I've rarely seen poetry that so vividly gives me a picture of physical dimensions...a room...window...lights from the outside...etc. I have to say this was an uncomfortable read for me in the beginning. Not for the wording, but primarily the content. I almost didn't keep reading. After I pressed on, though, I was drawn towards this character, found myself pulling for her, and, by the end, rejoicing for her. You sucked me in and lifted me up with your magic. I can't say anymore than that...except that between last week and this week, I'm starting to become a poetry fan. :>)
05/22/06
Oh, my gosh!!!! You swooned and swayed my heart through the rhythmn and the powerful, driving pace of the words. Truly a remarkable piece of writing. So quickly I was pulled into your realm of sin and salvation. The images knocked me off ballance and kept me reeling through the end with deep compassion, empathy and tears. WOW WOW WOW.
05/22/06
Wonderful, wonderful writing.
05/22/06
Ohmigosh! When you asked me to read this, I thought it was an OLD entry. I loved it then and still do.
05/22/06
Talent saturates each word and fills the readers soul. What more can a writer do? Brilliant.
Wow. This is nearly perfect. It brought tears to my eyes.
Beautiful, breathtaking picture.
05/23/06
The story line is obvious even through the well educated vocabulary that this writer has used to describe this scene so eloquently. Simply stated - although above average intellectually speaking, the common peon like myself, for instance, can still grasp the message.
05/23/06
Wow, Purity! This is absolutely amazing! I love your use of sharp, abrasive words to paint a vivid picture. BRILLIANT!
Well, "wow" has already been said...and otherwise, WOW!! The depth and passion here are so riveting and yet accessible - you know? Truly a brilliant work. :-)
05/23/06
Just me back again! I've read this about 10 times now ... love it! I put this on the boards but thought would mention here WHY the title jumped out at me this week. Because my entry in Masters is called Shadow Dancer! What are the odds we'd both choose nearly the same title in prosperity? As they say ... great minds! ;-) Well done, Purity!
Absolutely wonderful in every way, Purity!! The Poe-like rhythm beats like a mythic drum throughout the piece and is hypnotic in drawing the reader in and through the piece. Your word choice is exquisite! Love the imagery and contrasts!!
05/25/06
Powerful, beautiful, brilliant!
05/25/06
Simply amazing. Congrats!
05/25/06
Very well deserved win. COngratulations!
Look at you go! A couple of weeks ago I noticed you left a comment along the lines of 'I wish I could write poetry as good'...no wishing needed, you are already there. Awesome job & congrats on your win.

Blessings!
Trina
Welcome to Masters, Purity. This is staggeringly good. (How's that for adverb abuse? :-))You are AMAZING.
05/25/06
Congratulations, Purity! This poem is awesome. The level of your poetry is so far ADVANCED that you definitely are a MASTER.


05/25/06
Well done on an awesome entry! Can I put this on my blog with your byline?
05/25/06
Reading this "dark" story, with its rhythm touched a forgotten memory. Yes! The perfect format for your poem, patterned, it seems, after the meter of Master Edgar Allen Poe's "Quoth the Raven, 'Nevermore.'" What genius! It's as if you found the perfect frame for your painting. Congratulations on rising to the heights! God bless you with all His best.
05/25/06
Way to go Purity! I felt like I was right there in the room with her. The imagery was so dramatic. This is a well-deserved editor's choice award.
Aha! I told you "master painter" and truly it is so! The only thing I can't believe is that you started yourself as a 'Beginner' in the first place. You are a humble illustration of Luke 14:10-11, and an inspiration to me. All's now right with the world. Congratulations!
You're definitely a Master, Purity! God has blessed & anoined you as a poet. You're also blessed with a humble spirt. Congratulations on another deserved win!