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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hope (05/04/06)

TITLE: Having Only Peace Eternally
By Shari Armstrong
05/10/06


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“There!” Tess spun and pointed to her right. “Tell me you didn’t see that?”

Angie sighed and looked around. “See what?”

“You didn’t see that light? Or whatever it was? I keep seeing it out of the corner of my eye. When I turn to look, it’s gone.”

“You need to get checked. Maybe your eyes are going crazy.” Angie muttered, “Along with your mind.”

Tess swatted at her sister, “I heard that.”

“There’s nothing there. Just unlock the door, these bags are getting heavy.”

* * * * *


“That was close. She almost saw you this time.”

“I know, and I know what I’m doing.”

“You act like you want her to see you.”

”Well, at least my charge is looking.”


* * * * *


“Angie, you wanna come with me tonight?”

“And spend all night with a bunch of geeks like you? No thanks.” Angie grabbed a can of pop from the fridge. “I have better things to do with my time.”

Tess put the last of the groceries away. “Well, I hope you change your mind. If you do, I’ll be leaving after dinner.”

* * * * *


“Push that button.”

”Ok.”

“I’ll just pull this plug out a tiny bit and….”


* * * * *


“Stupid computer. What’s wrong with it now?” Angie tried to turn it on again, but it was still dead. “I’m supposed to chat with Joe tonight.” She pouted and grabbed her phone and dialed. “Busy. Of course it’s busy, he’s on-line waiting for me.” She tossed the phone on her bed and headed back to the kitchen.

Tess looked up, “Pizza?” She took the pan out of the oven and set it on top of the stove.

“Yeah, I guess.” She got two plates from the dishwasher. “Um…is that invitation still open? My computer is dead. Going with you beats sitting here bored all night.”

”Sure is.” Tess smiled as she served up the pizza. “You might surprise yourself and enjoy it.”

”Whatever.” She blew on the pizza before taking a bite.

Tess bowed her head and said a silent prayer and began to eat.

* * * * *


“So how much is this going to cost tonight?”

”Nothing, it’s free.” Tess turned into the parking lot.

”Nothing is free. There’s always a catch.” Angie checked her makeup in the mirror.

* * * * *

“Stay close to her. It’s going to be a long night.” He nodded at the dark cloud gathering just over the horizon.

“Got it.”


* * * * *


“This line is really long. I can’t believe so many people came out for this.” Angie craned her neck around the people in front of her to see how far from the door they were.

“It’ll go fast once the doors open. You’ll love the band. They have an awesome sound.”

The darkness slithered closer to the group.

* * * * *


Angie shuddered. “What was that?”

“What was what?” Tess looked around.

”I saw something…weird.”

”Weird how?”

Angie shook her head, “I guess your craziness is catching. Nevermind.”

* * * * *


“Back off, that one’s mine,” he hissed.

They all maneuvered closer to the girls.

“Not if she has hope restored and takes that step.”

“Ha! You know I stole that when their parents died so… mysteriously.”

“But, then why has this one only grown stronger since then?” He simply smiled and held his ground.


* * * * *


As they made their way to their seats, Angie read the banner above the stage, “Having Only Peace Eternally? How corny is that?”

Tess said, “That’s the name of the band, Hope.”

The curtain went up and the music started.

* * * * *


“I’m not going to tell you again, that one is mine.” He moved to cover her ears.

“No, she’s not.” A sword slid gently between the scaly hand and Angie’s ear.

He cringed and backed off.


* * * * *


Angie smiled, “This isn’t half bad.”

”Told you.” Tess clapped to the beat.

* * * * *


“Why don’t you leave? You look like you’re not feeling well.”

“I’m fine,” he spat. He reached out to touch her heart, but again a sword came between the two.

* * * * *


As the band announced the alter call, Tess looked at her sister and said another quiet prayer.


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Val Clark05/13/06
How little we see and understand of the spiritual realm! Thanks for this gentle reminder that God is quietly going about His business and His will, prevails. I think you stopped at just the right place. So, next time something goes wrong with my computer.... :-)
Jessica Schmit05/13/06
This is a winner!!! A++++. Perfect in my opinion. So creative. reminded me a little of Peretti's book "This Present Darkness." Can't wait to find out who are are so I can read more! My favorite so far.
Brandi Roberts05/14/06
Well written - though the ending seemed to drop off, it left HOPE. Hehe. I liked this!
Cassie Memmer05/14/06
An everyday occurrence for mankind. What if we could really see the spiritual world? We'd certainly pray more! I enjoyed this, great job!
Linda Watson Owen05/14/06
Love the way you used dialogue so skillfully all the way from the beginning 'light' to the ending altar call! You made the 'other world' so very believable, as it should be. You had my attention all the way!!
T. F. Chezum05/15/06
Loved the dialogue and the story. Great writing.
Carla Feagans05/15/06
This was very well done and very creative. The use of dialogue was masterful.

Great reminder of how life REALLY works.
Rita Garcia05/15/06
One of my favorites. Creative, well written, right on topic. Winner!
Karen Treharne05/16/06
Well done indeed. Creatively written with a strong story line. The title does not exactly fit, but that's just my opinion, and very minor. There is always a battle between good and evil going on in our life. This story lifted my spirit as it reminded me that God is Almighty and possessive. He does not give up on us - ever. Thank you for blessing us through your writing.
Beth Muehlhausen05/23/06
Nicely done, Shari! Very creative and effective. Loved the intervention of the sword. :-)