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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Love (04/27/06)

TITLE: You left flowers...
By Linda Watson Owen
05/03/06


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You left flowers on my desk years ago.
My surprise was dwarfed
by a bittersweet dread.
We were friends, only friends,
I thought,

but this changed it all.

I awkwardly stumbled,
bumbled,
a ‘thank you, but….”
with flowers in my hand.

The happy question in your eyes
wilted into disappointment
as I tried to make it better
saying….,

…well,… I have no idea now.

What did I say?
…as I stood there,
searching
for words,
with flowers in my hand.

You smiled, saving face,
and stammered,
“We’ll still be friends.”
I nervously replied,
“Yes, …friends.”

It could have ended there,
with awkwardness
our strange, shared garden.
For how could I know
then
who you truly were?

My friend,
whose eyes
no cinema would boast
now became lost
in life’s forever forward.

But other loves grew cold.
I’d found no heart
as pure
as sure
as the one who’d given flowers
on my desk so long ago.

Sweet breezes blew
and scents
as fresh as rain
brought images of blossoms
from you once again.

You left flowers in my heart.
Though other loves I knew,
my thoughts,
my memories,
returned to you.

You left flowers in my heart.


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Marilyn Schnepp 05/04/06
Absolutely beautiful! Very touching and sentamental..."you left flowers in my heart". Loved it!
Amy Michelle Wiley 05/04/06
What a bittersweet poem. Beautiful.
Laurie Glass05/04/06
Aww, what a sweet poem. He left flowers in her heart and so much more. Beautiful.
Helen Paynter05/07/06
Oh no! It had a sad ending! Beautiful poem, but a sad ending! (What I'm trying to say is you made me care, which is excellent. And did I mention that it is beautiful?)
Debbie OConnor05/07/06
This is very pretty and romantic. I like the overall flow, but I find ellipses ... distracting in poetry. Great job.
Jan Ackerson 05/08/06
As ever, you are truly a master. I'm always in awe of everything you write. Just wonderful, and so tender.
Pat Guy 05/08/06
From flowers on a desk to flowers in her heart. Beautifully tender and lovely. Once again, so precious.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/09/06
Beautifully done. You expressed her feelings very well.
Purity Snowe05/09/06
Very nice on love unrecognized and unappreciated... until too late. Touching!
Maxx .05/09/06
Wow ... don't we all have a few loves in the past that we wonder about. You captured that emotion very well. Another strong entry. Great!
Suzanne R05/10/06
Very sweet!
Linda Watson Owen05/10/06
Author's note: I know the ending left the reader hanging a bit. I intended it to for the dramatic effect. However, dear reader, do you think it's possible that these two found each other again? Must it be a 'sad' ending? Just a thought :)!
dub W05/10/06
Generally, a well formed poem.
Jessica Schmit05/17/06
Oh my goodness Linda! I just read this and was awestruck. This is incredible. I've been that person thinking those exact thoughts, yet you articulated them much better. Amazing. What an incredible about of talent you have!
Jan Ackerson 01/29/07
Linda, I'm so glad that you've joined the FW 500! I'm going to feature this wonderful poem on the Front Page Showcase for the week of February 12. Look for it on the home page.
Linda Watson Owen02/12/07
Thank you, Jan, and to everyone else who is so gracious as to leave a comment on this poem. It is an honor to have "You left flowers..." showcased on the Faithwriters Home page. Faithwriters is a special blessing in my life. This guild has helped me to improve my skills as a writer and, very importantly for this procrastinating poet, to actually build a marketable portfolio of work. Faithwriters has my gratitude and my prayers for continued success in encouraging and equipping writers.

Just a couple more author comments concerning this free verse poem: The stumbling awkwardness in the first part of the poem is intentional in order to capture the feel of the awkward moments it describes in the speaker's life. The following smoother lines, some actually rhyming, are also intentional in order to capture the bittersweet sense of nostalgia the speaker feels when looking back on the earlier events in her or his life.

I hope each reader can smile and enjoy this little slice of poetic nostalgia.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/13/07
I really enjoyed this. You accomplished your goals in writing it. I, always looking for a happy ending, felt it was hinted at. Great job!
Mariane Holbrook02/16/07
Have I ever been there,
done that!

Wow!
Sharlyn Guthrie02/17/07
You captured the essence of youth in this poem. Loved the awkward moments you portrayed! Great job.
Ashley & Michael B. Reis02/17/07
Wow. I've never been into poems, but after just reading the first few lines, I wanted to read more! That's great! You captured the feelings and emotions so perfectly that I almost felt like I was reading a very, very short story rather than a poem. Great job!! You've opened my eyes to the beauty of poems. Thanks!