The Official Writing Challenge
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05/04/06
Very nice entry! I enjoyed it and the feelings came through beautifully. The journal entry seemed a little contrived and too neatly tied up. I would have prefered a different ending but all in all it is a strong entry.
05/08/06
I agree. I like it very much, but I'd finish before the last 6 paragraphs - let your readers draw their own conclusions. Good piece
05/08/06
What a beautiful picture of unconditional love!
I enjoyed your story. How wonderful to have such a man love you. Good job.
05/09/06
Interesting piece, the structure for the most part worked well. One question - what happened to the rose? If it is introduced in the beginning it usually must reoccur in the end. Good job though, an example of realization of God's love.
05/09/06
Oops, just reread and found the rose - sorry, I'm the idiot here, still would have used the rose in the very end. blessings - dub
05/09/06
Nice story, well-written. A wonderful little story about unconditional love.
05/09/06
It seems she's found a good man there. I don't usually go in for romantic stories, but when they are this good I could change my mind. :)
05/10/06
Beautiful ... and what a man!
05/10/06
This was good. Nice message, nice crisis, nice resolution. I think there was a bit much in the first para.. could have been broken up a little... but that's about it. Otherwise a very strong entry and you'll score well.