The Official Writing Challenge
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A beautiful tribute to our Lord and Master. Very well done - I really, really liked it! Thank you.
I laughed at the line: "Are you climbing up the slippery rung of yet another corporate ladder;
taking risks that would have another mortal emptying their bladder?"

Good writing and great thoughts. I have to admit that setting the bread machine to go off in the morning helps me get out of bed ... but it shouldn't be quite such a high motivating factor...... Thanks for the reminder.
Great message. Thank you for sharing it.
I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this piece and also the solid message. I felt a little disappointed at the wrapup but I don't know how to suggest that you make it better since I am only an occassional poet. I particularly enjoyed the line where you blended all of the family members so brilliantly into one line.
In your poem, you have written something for everyone to identify with. I loved how you tied it up at the end, reminding us what is truly important. Bless you!
Really well done, priorities often need an ajustment or two. Thanks for this gentle reminder.