The Official Writing Challenge
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05/06/06
A beautiful tribute to our Lord and Master. Very well done - I really, really liked it! Thank you.
05/07/06
I laughed at the line: "Are you climbing up the slippery rung of yet another corporate ladder;
taking risks that would have another mortal emptying their bladder?"

Good writing and great thoughts. I have to admit that setting the bread machine to go off in the morning helps me get out of bed ... but it shouldn't be quite such a high motivating factor...... Thanks for the reminder.
05/08/06
Great message. Thank you for sharing it.
05/10/06
I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this piece and also the solid message. I felt a little disappointed at the wrapup but I don't know how to suggest that you make it better since I am only an occassional poet. I particularly enjoyed the line where you blended all of the family members so brilliantly into one line.
05/10/06
In your poem, you have written something for everyone to identify with. I loved how you tied it up at the end, reminding us what is truly important. Bless you!
05/10/06
Really well done, priorities often need an ajustment or two. Thanks for this gentle reminder.