The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/06
Interesting story. I felt there were two seprate parts, and the first 4 paragraphs didn't quite belong with the remainder. I enjoyed both halves, though
04/28/06
Some very good thougts here..wonder if it is true? As a diary writer, I could relate to the looking back and wondering who I am so many years later. Some work needed on the ending but otherwise some good writing!:)
04/29/06
I'd really like to see an expansion of the "diary" part of this story--have the narrator opening the pages, reliving the memories, etc. The "devotional" first half was weaker, but also very thoughtful. I liked this vary much.