The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/06
You had some lovely metaphors here - I'd have liked to see you develop them a bit more. And I'd suggest you break up your paragraph, and even one or two sentences, a bit more. But a great devotional, good message
04/27/06
A brilliant Write and a fantastic Read - but it would be twice as good if you had separated it into...probably three paragraphs, with space inbetween. THat's my only suggestion.
04/29/06
This reminded me very much of the writings of the great Jonathan Edwards, the colonial preacher. Wonderful!
05/01/06
Well done. The metaphor worked well - very descriptive. I liked this.