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04/27/06
A very moving story - I liked it when she read the inscription from her Bible, and I liked the comparison you drew between the two books. I found it a bit hard to follow, in places, and I had to read it twice - I think because you sometimes use pronouns without it being clear who they refer to.
04/27/06
Very, very good! I could feel each emotion and the tug of war going on inside her - one we all go through sooner or later when we are married for umpteen years! ;)

Great contrast and message.

I really enjoyed this one!
04/29/06
Very moody, and you did a great job of "showing, not telling."