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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Inner Strength (04/20/06)

TITLE: Phlegm
By malik wilson
04/22/06


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"As a voice rises in prayer
that he knows no one will hear
he must face this time alone, this time of yearning, knowing death is near"

When you're a Christian, all things may be true or untrue. The truist truism can be laid false with mindless, heartless repetition, the most secular song or poem can be inverted (sweet inversion!) when Christ grabs and nails himself to the secular symbols of life and death. Perhaps no one (other person) will hear. Perhaps he is alone as David, or Abraham before. But the self soothing, the wall plastering of our minds with brilliant memory, the act of recombining, of comparison and grace soothed logic, this is our inner strength. Where lies become true, and intended harm is no such thing even the worst of symbols - inverted - spread like butter, covering the heart and mind. No one will hear no one will hear no one will hear no one will hear.


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Helen Paynter04/27/06
What an interesting piece. I'd have liked you so expand it more. 'when Christ grabs and nails himself to the secular symbols of life and death' - love this phrase. Didn't entirely grasp the end, and your POV changed around a bit.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/28/06
Phlegm? Perhaps I'm not getting it...or just too simple minded. Thank you for sharing.
Jan Ackerson 04/29/06
There are glimmers of brilliance here, like gems buried in sand. Perhaps work on making your writing more accessible? Your way with words is unmistakable.
Sandra Petersen 05/01/06
An interesting article, one that must be pondered through. You paint, if I understand you correctly, a sad but true picture of what our inner strength becomes: we compare ourselves to those around us, we soothe ourselves by thinking 'grace covers it all', and continue to live a lie. Is that what you were saying?
Now the technical things: If the opening line is a quotation, where can the reader find it? I don't recognize it.
"When you're a Christian, all things may be true or untrue." seems a bit awkward. Do you mean that when you are a Christian, there are no shades of truth, only true and false?
The next phrase, "The truist truism can be laid false with mindless, heartless repetition, the most secular song or poem can be inverted", is a gem. Like repeating a childhood Bible verse over and over but never applying the truth to the heart.
With a little more work, this piece could sear the conscience of one who is not passionate about the things of the Lord! PM me is I am wrong about your article; I am curious.
Jesus Puppy 05/01/06
Ah... the idea of a luke warm church... very interesting ending line... well done. Should have finished the whole things out as a poem.