The Official Writing Challenge
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This is quite a good read. Well done, I don't know why I kept thinking of JOAN of ARC or Deborah of the Old Testament, though??!!!
04/27/06
Some lovely bits of word craft in here. GOod job
04/28/06
Very good, especially the third stanza, which is gripping.
05/03/06
The line in the first stanza "Heavily scarred, but still standing" is tremendously powerful. Very visual and dynamic. It is so strong that the rest of stanza 1 and all of stanzas 2 and 3 pale in comparison and feel weak. Stanza 4 then picks it up again and there is a very strong finish.... love the ending "You're forgiven..." line. Another powerful bit. So, all in all very nice. ... and congrats on having perhaps the single most powerful line in the entire competition!