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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: Come Home, Oh Weary Traveler
By Crista Darr
04/13/06


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Come Home, Oh Weary Traveler

The wanderings of wayward paths
Step out from restless minds,
To loose the floods of hellish realms
Spawned from the devilís lies.

Forbidden fruit is dancing,
Before nomadic eyes,
ďA taste cannot be harmful,
You will not surely die.Ē

You ease into caressing waves
Of pleasures streaked with gold,
But the sharks are lurking under,
In dark places from of old.

The black clouds bellow thunder,
While the subtle tide creeps in;
Satisfaction is dissolving,
As youíre swept beyond the brim.

From the dregs of murky waters,
Tendrils of your lust arise -
Entangling and dragging down
To mock at your demise.

Engulfed by utter hopelessness
To drown in agony;
The flood of sin is pressing down,
And flames lick at your feet.

Oh hungry soul, so helpless,
All your glitter lies in mud;
The promised ease to troubled soul
Has drenched your hands in blood.

Who will touch depravity,
Oh, worthless, wretched one;
What light can reach your darkness,
What man can overcome?

There is a way of Mercy,
Running deeper than the ocean;
And with awesome lovingkindness,
His hand reaches for the loathsome.

Come home, oh weary traveler,
From the storm-tossed, angry sea,
To the One who calms the waters,
And sets the captives free.

Come home, oh weary traveler,
By the river thatís called grace,
Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place.

Come home, oh weary traveler.


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Debbie OConnor04/13/06
A powerful piece of writing from beginning to end. The picture of the entangled sinner finding mercy and being released is strong and beautiful. Awesome!
Julia May04/13/06
This is the ultimate in poetry. Absolutely beautiful and an awesome message...In Christ's Love, Julia
Pat Guy 04/13/06
Bravo! And awesome! A joy to the eyes, a pleasure to the heart - a light to the darkened path. Wow!
Jan Ackerson 04/14/06
Anyone who rhymes "loathesome" with "ocean" is my hero! This is a truly inspired poem--beautiful!
Suzanne R04/15/06
The imagery in this was exceptional. I know nothing about poetry, but I know that I really like this! I like the way that the last line stands alone too.

Beautiful!
Marilyn Schnepp 04/15/06
....And I have had the audacity to call MYSELF a poet! I humbly admit I am like a mustard seed compared to the author of this poem!
Beautifully done...what else can I say? Awesome!
Linda Germain 04/15/06
This is so very special! Is there any way to set it to music?
Teri Wilson04/17/06
Oh how I envy people who can write wonderful poetry! This is lovely.
Linda Watson Owen04/17/06
Beautiful theme, imagery, rhyme and rhythm! I especially enjoy the last four line stanza. It flows so lyrically, and its image is mesmerizing!
Helen Paynter04/17/06
Love this poem. A couple of critique points (and I'm in Intermediate, you're in Master's so do with them what you will lol)
'In dark places from of old'
the meter is a little interrupted here - how about 'In places dark of old'?
'Tendrils of your lust arise ' - ditto, maybe something like 'shades of lust arise' (or whatever you like - one syllable, anyway.
But it was a really great poem.
Debbie Sickler04/17/06
"Hard-hitting critiques welcome. I'm here to learn, too!"

Hmm...from the looks of this poem, you should be the one doing the teaching Crista! I'd be surprised if this doesn't place well in Editors' Choice. Great job!

Birdie Courtright04/17/06
'all your glitter lies in mud'...I like the visual contrast in that line. Beautifully written!
Beth Muehlhausen04/18/06
I'm not a poet, so things like this blow me away! Well done - exquisite, in fact!! :-)
Garnet Miller 04/18/06
Beautiful! I like the sing-song rhythm.
Jean Elizabeth 04/18/06
"Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place." Yes, yes, yes! Just the place I want to be! Beautifully and artfully written!
Jean Elizabeth 04/18/06
"Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place." Yes, yes, yes! Just the place I want to be! Beautifully and artfully written!
Jean Elizabeth 04/18/06
"Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place." Yes, yes, yes! Just the place I want to be! Beautifully and artfully written!
Brook Phelps04/20/06
Wow! That was wonderful! I hope you have found great success as a writer. Your work is beautiful! Truly you have made our Father smile. Please continue to share your work, His love, and His word. Best wishes!
Helen Paynter04/20/06
congratulations, crista
Corinne Smelker 04/20/06
Oh Crista - what is there to say about your piece? It was almost perfect, and as a judge for the week of fulfillment, I had two pieces that tied for 1st place on my scroing sheet - yours and 'Altar' - such excellent work done.

Well done - you truly are a Master!
Doug Jenkins04/20/06
Congratulations Crista! Come Home indeed!

Doug
Cheri Hardaway 05/06/06
What a masterful illustration of the truth that complete fulfillment comes only from the Father above. The decoys we chase engulf and drown us in a sea of deception. But there is always hope and the promise of fulfillment when we but call upon His name and receive His grace! Beautiful job! Cheri
Edy T Johnson 05/16/06
I had to come pay you a visit and thank you for your comment on my "hope" entry this week (see further notes at the Bittersweet poem). How fun to meet another faithwriter friend, who is also a nurse and homeschool mom---who writes poetry, too! Thank you, and God bless.
Sherry Wendling06/24/06
Christa, it's so rich! So beautifully crafted from the depths of your heart. The imagery, the flow, the tears in every line...I think of "Those who sow in tears shall reap in joy." The invitation at the end is so powerful because the preceding verses have ridden a river of pure compassion as you identify with the traveler. Tremendous piece!