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04/13/06
A powerful piece of writing from beginning to end. The picture of the entangled sinner finding mercy and being released is strong and beautiful. Awesome!
04/13/06
This is the ultimate in poetry. Absolutely beautiful and an awesome message...In Christ's Love, Julia
Pat Guy  
04/13/06
Bravo! And awesome! A joy to the eyes, a pleasure to the heart - a light to the darkened path. Wow!
04/14/06
Anyone who rhymes "loathesome" with "ocean" is my hero! This is a truly inspired poem--beautiful!
04/15/06
The imagery in this was exceptional. I know nothing about poetry, but I know that I really like this! I like the way that the last line stands alone too.

Beautiful!
04/15/06
....And I have had the audacity to call MYSELF a poet! I humbly admit I am like a mustard seed compared to the author of this poem!
Beautifully done...what else can I say? Awesome!
04/15/06
This is so very special! Is there any way to set it to music?
04/17/06
Oh how I envy people who can write wonderful poetry! This is lovely.
04/17/06
Beautiful theme, imagery, rhyme and rhythm! I especially enjoy the last four line stanza. It flows so lyrically, and its image is mesmerizing!
04/17/06
Love this poem. A couple of critique points (and I'm in Intermediate, you're in Master's so do with them what you will lol)
'In dark places from of old'
the meter is a little interrupted here - how about 'In places dark of old'?
'Tendrils of your lust arise ' - ditto, maybe something like 'shades of lust arise' (or whatever you like - one syllable, anyway.
But it was a really great poem.
04/17/06
"Hard-hitting critiques welcome. I'm here to learn, too!"

Hmm...from the looks of this poem, you should be the one doing the teaching Crista! I'd be surprised if this doesn't place well in Editors' Choice. Great job!

04/17/06
'all your glitter lies in mud'...I like the visual contrast in that line. Beautifully written!
04/18/06
I'm not a poet, so things like this blow me away! Well done - exquisite, in fact!! :-)
04/18/06
Beautiful! I like the sing-song rhythm.
04/18/06
"Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place." Yes, yes, yes! Just the place I want to be! Beautifully and artfully written!
04/18/06
"Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place." Yes, yes, yes! Just the place I want to be! Beautifully and artfully written!
04/18/06
"Sailing to your Fatherís arms
To find your resting place." Yes, yes, yes! Just the place I want to be! Beautifully and artfully written!
04/20/06
Wow! That was wonderful! I hope you have found great success as a writer. Your work is beautiful! Truly you have made our Father smile. Please continue to share your work, His love, and His word. Best wishes!
04/20/06
congratulations, crista
04/20/06
Oh Crista - what is there to say about your piece? It was almost perfect, and as a judge for the week of fulfillment, I had two pieces that tied for 1st place on my scroing sheet - yours and 'Altar' - such excellent work done.

Well done - you truly are a Master!
04/20/06
Congratulations Crista! Come Home indeed!

Doug
05/06/06
What a masterful illustration of the truth that complete fulfillment comes only from the Father above. The decoys we chase engulf and drown us in a sea of deception. But there is always hope and the promise of fulfillment when we but call upon His name and receive His grace! Beautiful job! Cheri
05/16/06
I had to come pay you a visit and thank you for your comment on my "hope" entry this week (see further notes at the Bittersweet poem). How fun to meet another faithwriter friend, who is also a nurse and homeschool mom---who writes poetry, too! Thank you, and God bless.
06/24/06
Christa, it's so rich! So beautifully crafted from the depths of your heart. The imagery, the flow, the tears in every line...I think of "Those who sow in tears shall reap in joy." The invitation at the end is so powerful because the preceding verses have ridden a river of pure compassion as you identify with the traveler. Tremendous piece!