The Official Writing Challenge
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Love it! You told this story very well. The poor guy was hounded by terrorists from beginning to end, but what an end. Rebeccah's introduction was so beautiful. I used to be blind too.
Oooo, I remember the first one in this series. Watch your POV shifts. Great job!
04/13/06
Yes, POV. How could Joel know the "bird" was silver when he is blind? Remember to keep inside only one person's head, and say things only that person would know.
Moving piece - good job.
04/15/06
I remember the earlier part of this too.

I love the ending - totally unexpected.

Well done.
04/15/06
This is the second article I have read today that is evidently part of a serial. I never watch serial stories on TV as I may not be able to catch them all, and don't want to get involved in something that I cannot follow through - so these readings of serial stories was done unknowingly and unintentional. Nice story, however.
04/16/06
Joel is back! This was a beautiful and touching conclusion to his story. What a perfect entry for "fulfillment." You definitely are a "master" storyteller. Loved every word. :-)
04/16/06
Whoa! Chills and wonder at how God DOES work at times. I'm so glad I read the first one. Please include it's title during hinting for others. They are both very much worth reading! Loved, loved it ALL. And I think these could be great witnessing tools for our sensitive Jewish friends. (I wonder who the Southern Belle is? ;))
04/17/06
This is very moving! I didn't read the first part of this story, but this installment felt complete to me, and it was quite touching. Only one thing didn't ring quite true: Rebeccah saying "I live in a small town in a Southern state in America." Just seems a bit stilted...

Loved your characters, and your beautiful ending. What timing, and a lesson for those of us who are shy about sharing our faith. Wonderful.
Wow, a power-packed message! You never know...none of us can ever know...only God does!!!
04/18/06
Excellent and well-written. Attention holding and riveting.
Fulfillment indeed! What a day that will truly be when we see Christ! Precious message. Amen.