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This is so sweet. I enjoyed it immensely.
04/14/06
Very precious, and excellent writing skills.
wonderful story but would have read better if you didnt keep mentioning Sheila and Louie's names and used pronouns more often.
Sometimes kids are stronger than us...loved this story!
04/16/06
Precious story and good message. :0)
04/16/06
Butter and jelly toast was the fulfillment? It seems that way. But probably the fulfillment came from the son saying "all is going to be alright". Nicely done.
A sweet story!
Very nice story. Good job.
04/19/06
You captured the essence of how precious this scene was. I would like to have seen and experienced it a little more. Precious!
04/19/06
A well-written message of hope to the single mom. Great work.
04/20/06
This was sweet and sad all at once. Hard to hide adult feelings from children, even eight-year-olds. The middle was a bit slow, but you showed how the mother was fulfilled in the end by her son. Thanks for sharing.
04/20/06
Eeewwww ... what a sticky mess ... but what a precious tale ... well done!
04/20/06
Children are such a precious gift from the Lord. Touching and real. Nice work.