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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: Your Song
By Sally Hanan
04/12/06


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I'm needy today.
Take me to pray -
to be with you.
Whisper to me.
Help me to be
a listener true.
Every door shut,
every thought cut
‘til only you’re here.

Down on my knees,
peace in degrees,
face to the floor.
Hands held up high,
palms open wide,
I wait and adore.
Body at ease;
no one who sees
but you, in me.

Hunger, desire
growl in the fire.
My spirit pursues,
More Lord, give more.
Empty me, pour
and fill me with you.

Wisps of your love
fit like a glove,
cocooning my heart.

Whisper my name.
Carefully aim
your laser at sin.
Burn out the dross;
thanks to the cross -
pure now within.
Cleansed by your grace,
this holy place
is mine to dance in.

Don’t want to leave;
here I believe
the depths of what’s true.
Here I find joy -
all I destroyed
atoned for in you.
Resting in you,
worries are few;
my Spirit is strong.

Onto my feet,
fulfilled, complete,
renewed with your song.


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Karri Compton04/13/06
I like this - a very original way to rhyme. It seemed a bit halting to read it, maybe because of the 3 line groupings, not sure. Still, good job.
Jan Ackerson 04/14/06
This poem is beautifully crafted and very touching. Thank you so much for this blessing.
Amy Michelle Wiley 04/14/06
I actually liked the "halting-ness" of this...I thought it added to the style. I love the message!
Suzanne R04/15/06
And it is in Him that we find true fulfilment ... beautiful ... thanks.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/15/06
Nice, but not exactly my cup of tea; but then, who am I? Just one lowly voice looking for something fulfilling in this group of Master Writers. I know for sure alot of work went into this, but it just didn't touch my innermost soul or move me to fulfillment. Good job however!
Linda Germain 04/15/06
Well done. It spoke to my heart, and in this old girl's humble opinion, captured the topic. Good stuff. :0)
Beth Muehlhausen04/18/06
Different, for sure...your creativity is shining! The "clipped" rhythm is like punctuation marks all the way through.
Linda Watson Owen04/19/06
Ah, 'peace in degrees', love that image! The whole poem is poignant and powerful, but that image really stays with me...awesome...'peace in degrees', yes, so true.
Debbie OConnor04/20/06
I like this, it is sweet and has a nice rhythm. Good job.